Dream Series 1:4 Tinman's Coil Of Rusted Dreams

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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2007-08-02 12:11 PM

Dream Series 1:4 Tinman's Coil Of Rusted Dreams

So night flays the strands of dream
And softened fibers twisted become
As pythons of cedar to wrap around
The bare dejection that comes
When in an isolation of restrained proximity
Loose ends loom above
Anticipating the fall that bruises
Fair skinned faith though such braids
As are coiled around
Become embraced

So little light to see
The juxtaposition of images
Drawn with short strokes of breath
That moan to empty air
Filled with flaming broom

Touch not the dark hem or douse the fire
But let it burn
Lest we melt upon stone
In some lucid puddle of screams

Loose, Loose ends of bark stripped bare
These dark woods dare stiff hands
To lose the grip of rust and move
To tie knots again along slim throated moon
with eyes lowered from an ominous sky
Where genetic mutants grow wings
swinging too with free fingers
Along branches gnarled
These the turn of dream

I toss uneasily upon sharp straw dressed as logic
To ease the ache of joints too long
Unmoved
And let the dream begin
Amidst the copse of sumac strung red
But still
Return to the winding coils as bind
My reach incomplete
And die a soft exhale of loss
As I see her there
Finding courage for a lion
she sweeps up debris from storms that raged
When she thought she was alone

She could not huddle there
Or bind the ends of us to her lust
So comes forgetfulness
As it rains upon hollow tin
Filled only with the echoes of counting
One beat
Two
Two beat three
In slow throb of memory

She closed her eyes and tried not to hear

How close the heart she had given him
to breaking once yet
again

bel1e
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1 posted 2007-08-02 12:14 PM

~doin' the ***happy dance***~

~so glad you're here~

~smooches
~baby

SEA

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with you

2 posted 2007-08-02 12:27 PM

I'm so happy to read you again!!!
this is so freakin amazing....I'm going to read this one again and again...

loved....

"So little light to see
The juxtaposition of images
Drawn with short strokes of breath
That moan to empty air"

....and

"As I see her there
Finding courage for a lion
she sweeps up debris from storms that raged
When she thought she was alone"

and...

"So comes forgetfulness
As it rains upon hollow tin
Filled only with the echoes of counting
One beat
Two
Two beat three
In slow throb of memory"

so so excellent

Cpat Hair

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3 posted 2007-08-02 12:34 PM

thanks belle.. your prodding worked... to move a bit of rusted tin to return..if only for a moment or two...

Cpat Hair

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4 posted 2007-08-02 12:35 PM

Sea...

old friend..thank you for the kind words.. the kind eyes...
I think there is little still in what I scribble that is memorable or worth the space of page... so thank you ..for being so kind as to say it was enjoyed

bel1e
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5 posted 2007-08-02 12:36 PM

~flexes her prodding muscle~

**lol**

I love you, fierce~
~baby

SEA

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with you

6 posted 2007-08-02 01:00 PM

you know you are one of my most favorites

Cpat Hair

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7 posted 2007-08-02 01:03 PM

now now now belle.. don't get cocky...
lol

Sea... you truly are most kind to say so..thank you..

bel1e
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8 posted 2007-08-02 01:05 PM

~actually my proddig muscle is very tiny....you'd have to really search...to find it~~~

***lol

~thanks for putting up with me, Chief~~~

[This message has been edited by bel1e (08-02-2007 01:50 PM).]

Elan
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9 posted 2007-08-02 01:06 PM

I toss uneasily upon sharp straw dressed as logic
To ease the ache of joints too long
Unmoved
And let the dream begin

~*~

Oh, how we have missed you, my friend.

And just yesterday, your poetry was spoken of,
and how we might wish you back.

Someone must have heard us.

Cpat Hair

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10 posted 2007-08-02 01:11 PM

Elan,
thank you friend..for the eyes and kind words....

that my words would be missed... is a mystery to me... but it is a kind thought..to think they might

LeeJ
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11 posted 2007-08-02 01:13 PM

I cannot say I enjoyed this, as I was indeed mezmorized and had to read it several times....going back for another yet closer look

Finding courage for a lion
she sweeps up debris from storms that raged
When she thought she was alone

She could not huddle there
Or bind the ends of us to her lust
So comes forgetfulness
As it rains upon hollow tin
Filled only with the echoes of counting
One beat
Two
Two beat three
In slow throb of memory

(sighs)

marvelous writing!!!!!! Gripping and sad...

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2007-08-02 01:46 PM

That your words would be missed sir would be a mystery? Oh...but that they would not be would be would be more of a mystery...How could they not be?? What a lovely treat to feast our eyes upon your words. So good to see you here today, sir.

No more hangin' on to the past
No more filling up my tomorrows
With yesterday's sorrows
No more lookin' over my shoulder {T.Tritt}

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

13 posted 2007-08-02 01:50 PM

I dropped in to read for a few minutes..
and could not believe my eyes..still can't.
Is it really you?

Don't answer that..
Your impeccable writing gives you away.
It is SO good to read you once again.

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

Martie

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14 posted 2007-08-02 01:51 PM

Dear Ron....there is no time, it seems...as if words could just skip across years and turn them into this minute, this poem, and the man who wrote them, the poet...as always thought filled. I'm so glad to be able to read you still, and again!

Magnus

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15 posted 2007-08-02 02:23 PM

Let me guess that you have a spell check,
a word check, a language checker....a fancy doo dad that teaches you all sorts of new
hotrod words?? Right?

Welcome back Cap'n Sur...errr, Sir.....

serenity blaze
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16 posted 2007-08-02 02:48 PM

My memory is longer than yours.

Congrats, bbg--I didn't even see your lips move, and for a minute there?

I wanted to.

Don't hurt people.

Susan Caldwell
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17 posted 2007-08-02 03:28 PM

the whole team is here now!

I'm good...thanks for asking.

I can still feel the wind and your lips that day on the beach...

Don't hurt anyone else.
(fixed it)

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Midnitesun

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Gaia

18 posted 2007-08-02 04:12 PM

guess you already knew what words might fall upon this page in reply to such an offering from your mighty quill
too long, spatter, too long....
(juxtapositioning is fun) you've been a wayfaring stranger

Cpat Hair

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19 posted 2007-08-02 04:45 PM

I thank you all...for the indulgence..of allowing me to drop in after such a long absence...

I thank you all, for the kind words..and for the mild scoldings.... both show some level of care..enough to be kind to my clumsy words and enough to remind me I may have hurt people when I left....

my time these days... very limited it seems.. and life, more complicated than simple....
I can not say..I will stay or that I can visit day to day...
I can say..I am touched by all the replies.. and the kindness of you all...

thank you again.... and again.... and again....

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

20 posted 2007-08-02 06:45 PM

OH...wow...

Welcome home...

thank you for filling these oh so empty eyes!

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

21 posted 2007-08-02 06:55 PM

awww it's always so great to read you when you return~~ I hope all is well and that your days are fulfilling, even though we do miss you (...if I can speak for myself and others)

M

bel1e
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22 posted 2007-08-02 08:18 PM

oh my...now I know what they call this place passions in poetry~~lol

The poem, Chief....among your most intricate of the Oz Poems...and a treasure to read again and again....thank you for sharing it, here, love~

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~I love you, dearly~
~baby

[This message has been edited by bel1e (08-02-2007 09:24 PM).]

1slick_lady
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23 posted 2007-08-02 08:44 PM

oh wow he is back
and did i read series?

that means moremoremore

nice to have you back ron

Greeneyes

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24 posted 2007-08-02 08:51 PM

ohhhhhhhhhhhhh wow wow wow wow wow.....

welcome home capt!! what a site for eyes! good to see ya here...

and this...

wow

~~**~~
Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

Cpat Hair

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25 posted 2007-08-03 08:10 AM

thank you all.. for the indulgence..and the kind words..

can't promise I will stay or be back any time soon...but.. perhaps I can dig something else free of the rubbish and leave one more scribble here..

bel1e
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26 posted 2007-08-05 08:27 PM

suthern

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27 posted 2007-08-07 11:59 AM

I peeked onto PIP a few days ago... and though I didn't have time to open even a single poem... I left with my heart doing its very best jig... because I saw your name. *S*

And considering the fact that I can't dance worth diddly... does that tell you how much you've been missed??? *S*

It's a slice of pure heaven to lose myself in your words again...

Cpat Hair

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28 posted 2007-08-08 04:09 PM

Suthern... m'friend..it is so nice to see you..to know you peeked in..
now I can not comment on your dancing ability... but my words a slice of heaven to read.. now ma'am... you use the phrase very losely I am sure... they are more a case of wading through hades to find ice water I think...

hope you are well... and the world has been kind t you..

suthern

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29 posted 2007-08-10 11:29 AM

I must disagree, kind sir. *S* Your words may be as welcome as that glass of ice water after a wade through hades... but I know a slice of heaven when I read one... even if I have been tossed out of that blissful haven on my (r)ear and refused readmission. *G*

If you ever have a few free moments, send an email my way. *S* As for how I am... John Mellancamp's song "Jack and Diane" sums it up "life goes on, long after the thrill of living is gone." *G*

Take care, master of words. *S*

vandana

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30 posted 2007-08-10 11:40 AM

enjoy your read

bel1e
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31 posted 2007-08-17 10:11 AM

~~I'll have to bring out some of my Oz poems....this is indeed a series I cherish deeply~~~

SmartChick
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32 posted 2007-08-17 11:50 PM

It is so good to see you posting, again.

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