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Sunshine
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0 posted 2007-07-31 10:04 PM


What Is Not Heard

Someone looks up from the street
possibly to see music swinging
from chimes that are
normally quiet
or at least the walkers may
imagine what they might,
if they even see
through half-opened blinds…



but these chimes are special,
from another land,
carried via passage from a long ago yesteryear,
or so it seems;
from another place, another time
when there was a chocolat love,
a Konrad spirit of want,

and they, the chimes, they have decided
that they remained quiet
for far too long…

and the wolf howls

possibly they had to know a need
in this, their new room;
but it did not matter
if the window was open,
or if a fan was blowing…
for now, in the middle of the night,

when the moon listens,

they sing and
swing, a soft clinking of
right, we agree,
tinkling sweet sounds
a mesmerizing syncopation

and what the passersby don’t hear
are the pleasant fantasies
such sounds
bring me
beyond the blinds,
and in steamed blush,
the windows agree.

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

© Copyright 2007 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2007-07-31 11:08 PM


Hi Sissie....I know the shape and sound of those, a whisper made even softer by mood and imagination.  Worthy of a poem.
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2 posted 2007-07-31 11:33 PM


Very nice, descriptive writing. Your use of imagery was exceptional. Very well done.
JamesMichael
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3 posted 2007-08-02 02:30 AM


Silky...James
Rick
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4 posted 2007-08-02 05:53 AM


Loved this my friend, great imagery right to the last line, very much enjoyed.

Rick

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5 posted 2007-08-02 08:10 AM


they sing and
swing, a soft clinking of
right, we agree,
tinkling sweet sounds
a mesmerizing syncopation

mon dieu, that's strong.
much enjoyed.

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2007-08-02 08:16 AM


ahhh...beauty.   Lovely the sounds....
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7 posted 2007-08-02 08:30 AM


sometimes what is not heard has more meaning~~

beautiful writing, K
M

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8 posted 2007-08-02 10:36 AM


oh...niiice~

~your descriptions & visuals...as lovely as ever~

~babygirl~

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9 posted 2007-08-02 11:36 AM


nice read
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10 posted 2007-08-02 12:44 PM


"a mesmerizing syncopation" ~ Indeed! ~ as are your mellifluous mots.

Love & Sun Light,
Linda

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11 posted 2007-08-02 01:38 PM


amazingly beaufiful...like a whisper of deepest purest thought...


Patricia
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12 posted 2007-08-05 07:36 AM


Soft and beautiful.

Patricia

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13 posted 2007-08-05 11:53 AM


Beautiful Karilea!
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14 posted 2007-08-05 12:08 PM


The source of my imagination from early childhood and unto this day. My cousin gave me a set of chimes at my daughters funeral. And because the wind does not inspire me often enough they hand on my closet door. Yes you have again touched deep inside of me. Lovely is this piece.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Robert Jordan
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15 posted 2007-08-05 12:43 PM


Sunshine,

This is a very nice read.

Bobby

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16 posted 2007-08-05 08:53 PM


You're such a chimer!
You can get the reader involved so easily.

Eric

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17 posted 2007-08-06 09:27 PM


A 'write' most pleasant and superb!

serious, sustained applause!!

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18 posted 2007-08-07 11:02 AM


oh, I do like this charming chime write, Karilea!
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19 posted 2007-08-07 12:20 PM


good read
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20 posted 2007-08-08 01:55 PM


I'm very partial to windchimes. I love the melodies they produce...so beautiful, much like the aftertones of this piece
Ruth

I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

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21 posted 2007-08-08 05:48 PM


that would be so cool to have music on the streets, listening to some Pink Floyd or Bach, or any Jim is fine with me, some flowing trippy stuff to enjoy the night, the dusk and dawn.
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22 posted 2007-08-08 07:44 PM


I can hear them now...Did I ever stop?
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23 posted 2007-08-12 12:39 PM



the moon and I love the sound Karilea
we are listening intently


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24 posted 2007-08-12 05:15 PM


K

This is sheer beauty.  
I want to frame it and hang it in my mind
to savor again and again.

A

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25 posted 2007-08-14 04:21 PM


"and what the passersby don’t hear
are the pleasant fantasies
such sounds
bring me
beyond the blinds,
and in steamed blush,
the windows agree."


very nice ending..the hint... at the essence of intimate...

as always ma'am.. your descriptive ability is a pleasure to read..


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26 posted 2007-08-15 11:55 AM


Amazing poem Karilea. I thoroughly enjoyed it, my friend.

"Well I wish that you would cheat with someone, 'cause you're like diggin' holes in water and we know that can't be done."

Sunshine
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27 posted 2007-08-22 11:01 AM


Thank you, everyone!




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