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Bronzeage
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since 2007-07-20
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0 posted 2007-07-30 12:26 PM


BoyBeautifulBoy
Infant who climbed over my shoulders.
Boy who ran over the roof like a goat
and through trees like a squirrel.
You fell in my pond and didn't touch
bottom until the other side.
BoyBeautifulBoy
Carried the world on
a ten year old back.
Never stopped.
Never looked back.
Made of concrete and steel.
BoyBeautifulBoy
You brought pretty girls.
Like a proud cat
leaving a mouse on the step.
Worked like a Trojan
and never kept a dollar.
BoyBeautifulBoy
If I was your island
in your sea of grief
you were my gem
found shining on the beach
and now you are a ship
sinking beneath the horizon
dressed in green
with a black beret
BoyBeautifulBoy
I hear the pipes, Dannyboy.
They call you
and I want to
stop them with dirt.
and beat the man
who uses you so poorly.
BoyBeautifulBoy
Let me hold you
before you leave.
Climb over my shoulders
and swim my pond.
It is the strong one's
turn to weep.


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2007-07-30 07:09 AM


Nice writing...lots of emotions in this one...James
JLHunter
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since 2006-10-08
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2 posted 2007-07-30 08:46 AM


Hi, Bronzeage.

I have just about convinced myself that this is a "war" protest of some kind (written by a "grieving" parent or grandparent, perhaps?), but I'm not quite sure.  Of course, that's a poet's prerogative; to write something with many possible meanings.

Anyhow, bravo!  Yours is a unique style that carries an emotional punch.  I could feel the emotions oozing out of this one...

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

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3 posted 2007-07-30 09:04 AM


I really like that it can mean different things to different readers...it sure tugged on my heart strings!
BBGrrl
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4 posted 2007-07-30 12:21 PM


Even more so now.

brings tears to my eyes, Bronze.


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