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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2007-07-28 09:20 PM


      Driftwood Beach Sunset

While misty-magenta mountains rest,
A lovely driftwood beach-silhouette
frames a small ship skimming the far
  horizon
in one last saffron sunburst,
just before soft twilight sweeps
across a grand teal sea,
where gentle milky-blue waves
foam ‘round fine-sculpted rocks.
On smooth silver sand…
a lone seabird and time
  walk together.



© Copyright 2007 Bruce E. Adams Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Bronzeage
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1 posted 2007-07-28 11:16 PM


Very good piece. I love the images.
Berenice
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2 posted 2007-07-29 01:01 AM


Ah, the beauty took my breath away.
most fine write!

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3 posted 2007-07-29 01:11 AM


sigh....you had me from the title, your images and emotion....throughout the piece....just pure poetry! pure poetry!!

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ArtSolstice
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4 posted 2007-07-29 12:53 PM


The beauty of this scene is enhanced by the choreography with which you've constructed it. You draw the eye in a crescent from the mountains to the beach, outward to the ship and the horizon, then back to us on shore, ending with the ephemeral:

"a lone seabird and time
  walk together."

Beautifully done, and the patinas are exquisite.

The Lady
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5 posted 2007-07-31 03:28 PM




"On smooth silver sand…
a lone seabird and time
  walk together."

made me stop
and sit awhile poet

Robert Jordan
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6 posted 2007-07-31 05:35 PM


Hi Bruce,

Very Good

Bobby

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