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Air Combat |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197
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Where the pine line cuts the field Gray Guardian holds the high branch, pitched in the wind, watching sky and ground. Hungry bumble fumble Crow, egg eater, chick killer, nest robber, crosses the line. Gray Guardian fires into the sky, fast and high into the sun, flips and dives fearless, into crow back. Strike once, strike twice, tiny talons tear, bumble fumble tumble Crow falls, trailing black feathers like smoke recovers and flies for cover in the pines. Fierce Guardian rolls and climbs high again to strike and hold, tearing crow neck, gray and black wings flap against the sky screaming orange beak, shredded black feathers whirl toward the ground, locked in free fall until Guardian breaks free to hold the air between Crow and pines. Bumble fumble Crow flees across the field to hide and preen his torn coat and pride. Gray Guardian holds the high branch pitched in the wind, to sing his victory declaration to the trees. Hear me, Crow I am Mockingbird. This is my sky. No chicks die today Author's note: Mockingbirds are territorial and have well defined bounderies to their nesting area. They attack any preditor without reguard for their own safety, no matter if it is a crow, cat or snake. [This message has been edited by Bronzeage (07-26-2007 07:08 PM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I loved that as I read, I watched!! That makes me want to read more  very much enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Magnificent piece of writing! ~ Alive with action and passion! It was as though you had actually witnessed the mockingbird defending her nestlings from the crow bandit! Vivid and very captivating!  EA |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Superb animation, articulation...oh, the height and bredth of nature at it's finest. So very well done! |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
I saw this sight just the other day when a pair of Mockingbirds took on several crows. I love the cockiness on the last few lines. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes! I could see the battle, sort of reminding of two planes during world war I. The Mockingbird is a gutsy little critter. Excellent penning, well done. |
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poeticdestiny Junior Member
since 2007-07-29
Posts 19Georgia |
Very well done. Your words painted a very clear image in my mind. I enjoy reading more of your work. |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
I am reminded of Snoopy and the Red Baron. I can hear the roar of the guns and the scream of the engines. Absolutely love this, Bronze. |
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