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folding their stems |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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When the world has been reduced to a dark night I will find you-- a taste of ashes floating on air light&dark, earth&sky embrace such beautiful harmony a single petal made for words -- this eternal image of reflection on water tomorrow I will rise early to touch the faint spread of sun, as the river flows through my fingers my dreams of you exist just for me the very depth of edges from these walls that rain, will replace your tears, in language only you remember: under stained glass and woven colors scattered over the floor and through the windows nothing will move but the daffodils folding their stems to die ~~**~~ Life is a balance of holding on and letting go (KU) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren, you always write of sadness in such a lovely way, and one can feel pain through your words.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
light&dark, earth&sky embrace such beautiful harmony ~*~ this leaves an ummmmmmm in my mind...  |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
my dreams of you exist just for me I like this a lot. MoonShadow . |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"my dreams of you exist just for me the very depth of edges from these walls" I love how you think and how you put those thoughts into words. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Powerfully fine, emotive imagery!: finding someone as a “taste of ashes (!)”; “touch(ing) the faint spread of sun”; I am especially fond of: “my dreams of you exist just for me the very depth of edges from these walls”; “stained glass .... woven colors scattered over the floor” AND: “through the windows nothing will move but the daffodils folding their stems to die (!)” “Life”…seems mostly a matter of an on-going and ever-accelerating attrition (that ‘letting go’ part of your ‘page-ending’ quotation) This ‘write’ also seems a (universally impressionistic) “slice of everyperson’s-life dejavu”…making that rather bittersweet ‘been there too’ connection with, I suspect, most(?!) readers… serious and long-sustained applause!! ~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You dear poet lady, make me sigh. (That is not easy to do.) Sent it to the Moth Mother, she will love this one. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ "tomorrow I will rise early to touch the faint spread of sun," Ah, as I have done this day ...~ This is a lovely poetic piece~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
just had to come back for another 'read' of this one!! simply exquisite!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
like Sharon, your words make me sigh~~ M |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
love ya all...thanks so much.... ~~**~~ |
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