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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2007-07-23 02:02 PM

I can still stand by its sight
But it never gets easier
As if the grave engrains the ground
Six feet deeper, each time I come
To its parlor of pain,

As it watches my feet
Knock the rocks around
Their black soiled homes.

She is like the cemeteries rose,
Yet its sight is sweet like
The owls that rise
As the night stretches thin
To their mouths that speak of nothing
As their eyes risen with sin.

It unfolds upon her
Black widowed bed of
Crows that watch
From the airs
Tight, still, mirage,

She is the sound
That carries the day forward
And as she sleeps
Her body coils
With the shadows
Resting with the words
Cemented on her gravels portrait.

Within the sightly gray
Over her graves descent,
She leaves me on my knees
As the Eastern wind
Listens with its fingers
Above the white moire
I remember she always was.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2007-07-24 08:59 AM

So much sorrow conveyed in such stunning images... This is excellent!!!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2007-07-24 10:48 AM

gosh this is sad

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

3 posted 2007-07-24 07:07 PM

Thank you for the responses, happy you enjoyed.

Tomer

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2007-07-24 10:37 PM

amazing Tomer...

"She leaves me on my knees
As the Eastern wind
Listens with its fingers
Above the white moire
I remember she always was"

yes...

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

5 posted 2007-08-01 01:55 AM

This is beautiful
.. and so sad.

.. and so beautiful
in all the sadness.

A

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2007-08-01 06:46 AM

Beautiful phrasing and visuals throughout, Tomer ... very much enjoyed this.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2007-08-01 01:02 PM

"I can still stand by its sight
But it never gets easier
As if the grave engrains the ground
Six feet deeper, each time I come
To its parlor of pain"

I can relate...well done.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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