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Jenna
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0 posted 2007-07-23 09:18 AM


To be alone
is to feel the breeze move in all angles,
You can feel it
but there will never be any warmth
from the sting that whips itself around you.

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suthern
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1 posted 2007-07-23 10:03 AM


How well I know that sting!!! Well done!!
BBGrrl
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since 2007-07-17
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BC, Canada
2 posted 2007-07-23 12:57 PM


A nice little peice.  A suggestion, you might rewrite this as a tanka.

5,7,5,7,7

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2007-07-23 02:28 PM


Nice writing...James
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