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the fragile of momma jane

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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 07-17-2007 06:51 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Stranger


the old woman would read the words
on her frigidare with chips and gravy
a poem by her son when he was alive
written to god about sparrows
and forgiveness and coffee smells

she would talk to the lord then
about how she loved him
how she missed him and poppa
since they went out in the boat
and didn't come back home again

her old eyes would get watershine
she would rub the poem paper slow
like a little girl finger painting
trying to make their faces appear
so she could kiss them goodbye

sometimes the lord would talk too
she would listen and smile
and turn on tbn and the preacher boys
then just go to heaven for a while
sitting there beside the gold road

watching for the familiar of her men
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Sunshine
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1 posted 07-17-2007 09:30 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine




Thank you for this one.

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with you


2 posted 07-17-2007 09:46 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

this should have had a warning! Made my eyes sting...  
Kahlil
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3 posted 07-17-2007 09:48 AM       View Profile for Kahlil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kahlil

very touching, Dark
Drauntz
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4 posted 07-17-2007 10:06 AM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

a wonderful one.  esp

"her old eyes would get watershine
she would rub the poem paper slow
like a little girl finger painting
trying to make their faces appear
so she could kiss them goodbye"

very touching and emotional

beautiful

enjoyed
aziza
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5 posted 07-17-2007 10:37 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

Most beautiful!  You warm that chill off my morning.

A
Edward Grim
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6 posted 07-17-2007 11:37 AM       View Profile for Edward Grim   Email Edward Grim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Edward Grim's Home Page   View IP for Edward Grim

This is one of the best poems I've seen on here in a very long time. Cheers mate   - Ed

“Well all the apostles, they’re sittin’ on the swings, sayin’ I’d sell off my savior for a set of new rings.”

ladylisa
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7 posted 07-17-2007 01:31 PM       View Profile for ladylisa   Email ladylisa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ladylisa

Wonderful!!!!  This is why I love with all my heart.  Great poem......
BBGrrl
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8 posted 07-17-2007 01:47 PM       View Profile for BBGrrl   Email BBGrrl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BBGrrl

Oh, my.
Very sad.
Well done - I very much enjoyed this.
dgvarner
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9 posted 07-17-2007 01:50 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

this one fish-hooks me right in the heart!

touching write...

g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

The Lady
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10 posted 07-17-2007 03:06 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



your heart is showing
and it looks good

nakdthoughts
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11 posted 07-17-2007 03:56 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

Yes, this is the "You" I especially enjoy reading~~

M
Dark Stranger
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12 posted 07-18-2007 06:17 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

most humble thanks to each of you for your review of this soul side seeping..pipkrew you are a blessing to my mind, thank you

ms sun, you bless me

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ms suesea, humble thanks to you

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ms drauntz, thank you for the read

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kahlil friend, thank you so much for the touch


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ms az, lil lady you smile me thanks babe


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ed, thanks sir for the touch

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ladylisa, thank you so much ms for your read


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ms bb, thank you for the read


_____

dgv, you bless me thanks to you


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MMs, thanks babe for your smiles


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ladyone, your reads are special, thank you for the moments


rwood
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13 posted 07-18-2007 06:21 AM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

"watching for the familiar of her men"


So many emotions vie forth from memory to present with that one perfect ending line, which seems a string that's pulling my heart right out of me. When you write this way, the whole world seems fragile. Come back with a hug.


love,
reg
Dark Stranger
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14 posted 07-18-2007 06:25 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

regalone, a very slow hug...dirt road private river kind, thanks babe
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15 posted 07-18-2007 01:03 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

her old eyes would get watershine
she would rub the poem paper slow
like a little girl finger painting
trying to make their faces appear
so she could kiss them goodbye

You've taken us right into your poem... right into her room... Fantastic heart-touching work!!!
Gentle Spirit
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16 posted 07-18-2007 08:11 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

sometimes, you touch all the right place,
just so...

thank you D, for the touch.  
Dark Stranger
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17 posted 07-19-2007 06:53 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

suthern, thanks my friend


___________

ms gs, thanks babe
mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox


18 posted 07-19-2007 11:05 AM       View Profile for mytuesdaywishes   Email mytuesdaywishes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mytuesdaywishes

i havent been on this site for awhile...for a reason. but its good to see that there are still true poets here.
lovely and sad.

Dark Stranger
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19 posted 07-19-2007 05:35 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

thank you tuesday
Larry C
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20 posted 07-19-2007 06:58 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Well Sir, youdaman. I'm never disappointed when I read what your ink bleeds. This is perfection. I see images and feel emotions that only you can evoke. Much obliged for your sharing.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Dark Stranger
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21 posted 07-20-2007 06:35 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

larry, thank you sir for the eyed-bye
Earl Brinkman
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22 posted 09-30-2010 05:48 AM       View Profile for Earl Brinkman   Email Earl Brinkman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Brinkman

This is outstanding.  Wow!
Margherita
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23 posted 09-30-2010 07:39 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Don't know why I went to see the "Today's Topics", but I feel sure blessed by finding this poem up today (Earl finds pearls!) It gave me goosebumps.

Going to read it once again.

Love,
Margherita
Sunshine
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24 posted 09-30-2010 09:29 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Margherita...

Indeed...

Earl digs deep...

and uncovers many treasures.

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