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FadingSun
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0 posted 2007-07-17 03:49 AM


This is another re-post from 2000.

So this poem is about a girl, with whom I had 'secret' feelings for. Until I got the nerve to reveal them one night, I didn't know she had the same 'secret.' This girl that I wrote this poem about way back in 2000 - We're still together. She's my wife of 4 years, and we have a beautiful little girl. Imagine that

"I Remember"

I Remember the pitter-patter of the rain,
As it danced on the car roof that night.
I Remember my overwhelming nervousness,
My palms sweating and my tongue tied.

I Remember the talk and the laughter,
And all the silences in between.
I Remember exactly how you smiled that night,
As you had so many times in my dreams.

I Remember the surprise on your face,
When I finally gave into my heart.
I Remember waiting for your answer,
As we sat there in the dark.

I Remember how you looked at me,
As you so nervously gave your reply.
I Remember that last moment of silence,
As I fell deeply into your eyes.

I Remember as our bodies closened,
That feeling of long awaited bliss.
I Remember how my heart cried tears,
As our lips shared that passionate kiss.

I Remember everything about that night,
Your smile, your eyes, the smell of your hair.
And whenever our lips meet again in kiss,
Everytime...I'm taken back there.

© Steve Nelson

In the sight of Love, fear isn't even as great as a single hair:  in the law of Love, everything is offered as a sacrifice

© Copyright 2007 Steve Nelson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-07-17 10:25 AM


love the feel of this, and the back story! makes me smile
Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2007-07-17 01:02 PM


oh...how lovely and sweet!! both the story and the poem!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

dgvarner
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3 posted 2007-07-17 01:57 PM


good memories!  

g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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4 posted 2007-07-17 06:05 PM


again...fine 'slice-of-real-life' Romanticism!

obviously heartfelt and emotive!

[thanks for sharing this 'repost' and the story
  behind it!]

applause!!

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5 posted 2007-07-18 12:42 PM


Thank you for including the story behind this... both story and poem are beautiful. *S*
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