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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2007-07-16 06:32 PM



I hear it calling to me
It’s the sea
With moonlight rising over
And starlight
I hear the pounding in me
Of the sea
Waves after waves on the sand
And I stand
I smell the calling to me
Salt in wind
Longing to be out sailing
In it all
But no
I’ve other places to go
Things to do, people to sea
Places to be come daylight
Events to cause beginning
And none of it
Rides freely driven by the wind.

Gloom

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Drauntz
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1 posted 2007-07-16 07:12 PM


beautiful truly

enjoyed

secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2007-07-16 09:28 PM


‘powerful’ imagery!:

I hear it calling to me….
It’s the sea….

pounding in me…”

and, I am especially fond of the ending:

“I smell the calling to me
Salt in wind
Longing to be out sailing
In it all
But no
I’ve other places to go
Things to do….

Events to cause….
And none of it
Rides freely driven by the wind.”

long-sustained applause!!

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2007-07-16 09:31 PM


"Things to do, people to sea"
nice word play

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2007-07-17 11:24 AM


Thank you all
For taking the time to read and respond.

Gloom

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5 posted 2007-07-18 12:31 PM


You've captured the rhythm of the waves... excellent work!!
Professor Gloom
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6 posted 2007-07-18 04:38 PM


The sounds of the Ocean are one of my favorites
pleased you enjoyed

Gloom

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2007-07-18 06:21 PM


I borrowed your "driven by the wind" line which I loved~~

M

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