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Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2007-07-15 09:48 AM


A monster rises from the skin
eyes ablaze, the fangs displayed,
and spits the fire of vicious ire
into the air I breathe.

Down it travels hot, hot, hot,
through the esophagus
straight to that tender part
some would call a heart.

But ‘tis a place that spirit builds
with walls of love unroofed
and doors that open full unto
a better place to be.

Thus open it’s a landing strip
for devils, monsters, him,
and I’m surprised they still arrive
when every day I try, try, try,
to see them in a different light.  

And as the manic manners shout
walls and doors quiver quake
until a crumbled ruin that part
some would call a heart.

But foundations laid and sunken
suffer not that vicious ire
when buried deep and deeper than
a monster’s artful reach
and yet the wait for love’s rebuild
like a forever internship
in this excuse for life!

Helen / 15 July 2007


© Copyright 2007 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
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1 posted 2007-07-15 10:01 AM


beautiful poem.

enjoyed

wish you happy!!

WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12
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2 posted 2007-07-15 11:06 AM


I really like this one!!!!
BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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Come find me?
3 posted 2007-07-15 02:30 PM


"And as the manic manners shout
walls and doors quiver quake
until a crumbled ruin that part
some would call a heart."

I really enjoyed this

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

WindWalker
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4 posted 2007-07-16 06:27 PM


This is a very beautiful poem!!!!
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
5 posted 2007-07-17 12:59 PM


Thank you all so much for your comments.  If expression of a bad state of affairs comes out "beautiful" then I guess we live in amazing times.     
Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
6 posted 2007-07-17 01:36 AM


Wrapping my arms around you, Sweetie. ~ and sending some protective White Light, your way!!! ~ and some pink light to soothe your emotional state.

An explosive vent and a very compelling read!

~ There now, don't you feel better!

Giving you a warm, loving hug,

Linda
P.S. Tomorrow is a brand new day ~ and hopefully a much better one for you, Dear Helen.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
7 posted 2007-07-17 04:01 AM


Linda - You ARE an angel!  Thank you!
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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8 posted 2007-07-18 10:11 PM


Hi, Helen.  It's been awhile, huh?  I have met that monster before -- pretty tough to get rid of sometimes, too, but eventually he fades away.  Here's a hug, my friend.  Good writing, though!   ....jo
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
9 posted 2007-07-19 01:37 AM


Hi, Jo - hope you're doing okay and, yes, monsters do eventually fade into extinction and for that we can only be grateful.
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