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openthoughts
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since 2006-01-16
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Where the child can be free

0 posted 2007-07-15 02:28 AM


Why I Can't Turn Away

I have before found myself imprisoned
In useless cages
With meaningless locks
And bars of common glass:
They held me as long as I liked.
No less, no more.

And from time to time
My cages were more,
Not so easy to break;
Yet even bars of iron and steel
Will submit to a prisoner
With enough power and purpose.
These "stronger" cages could not hold me either.

But now I'm trapped by something new,
Held still not by bars or locks or chains
But by eyes; your eyes,
That leave me drained
Of all my power to break free
And all desire to try.

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Rick
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia
1 posted 2007-07-15 06:30 AM


openthoughts, this sounds so so sad my friend, all I can say is, close your eyes and run, freedom is your right and your spirit is yours alone.
This was a wonderful write and I felt each moment of imprisonment.

Rick

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
2 posted 2007-07-15 07:25 AM


well I can read this poem two ways,
in one way you are so attracted and in love with this person that you can't leave them.

The other is that you feel trapped,
like they have some kind of hold or power
over you.

You mention the eyes, and when you mentioned the eyes, I knew it was the first thought, that this person has a love spell over you.

Enjoyed your thoughts!
~ARH

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
3 posted 2007-07-15 09:59 AM


Oh, can not turn from beauty, turn or not turn, are all torture. Always cage myself in my thought.

beautiful poem and profound

enjoyed

Winter Butterfly
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since 2007-02-03
Posts 61
The hidden path beyond the ivy gate.
4 posted 2007-07-15 06:06 PM


You're reading my thoughts.  It's not the cages we can see that are dangerous it's the ones which bind us with the distraction of their beauty.

"I used to worry what people thought of me, then I broke through my cacoon"

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
5 posted 2007-07-17 06:46 PM


a most fine write!

[I REALLY enjoyed this!]

applause!!

P.S.: I really like your choice of P.I.P.
'UserName' (ID) too!

BBGrrl
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since 2007-07-17
Posts 181
BC, Canada
6 posted 2007-07-17 06:49 PM


Very well written.

I read and enjoyed.

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
7 posted 2007-07-17 07:39 PM


Sounds like freely twisting in the wind.  Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Enjoyed the read--very thought provoking.

Shenachie

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
8 posted 2007-07-17 08:28 PM


I read this as a good thing

maybe I'm wrong

but I can relate well to this

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
9 posted 2007-11-30 01:11 AM



Loved this!  much said about the "bars" that color us prisoner..

g

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