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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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Within this mind of mine a sheet of fog where clarity knows no home I will not bring that down upon you Within this mouth of mine destiny not meant to leave my lips words shaped to cut I will not form them Within this heart of mine wings spread full made of paper so sheer I will not write upon Within this soul of mine butterflies hoping to catch a breeze and rest gently upon it I will not let them loose Within me is hope clear as water but just as cold I will not swim |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Within" you is "heart" and "soul" ~ and talent! ~ A creatively expressive piece of writing!  EA |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
After reading and enjoying your other piece Exhale, I looked for another.  You have a lovely way of developing and carrying your theme forward. I enjoyed the repetitive format of each stanza, and the unique way you captured each stanza's independent importance to the whole. Really well done, much enjoyed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang girlfriend you rock! |
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