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Dominique-Simone
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I am dark, not here, not there; absent in your eyes
clouded by perception, time, and doubt.
Make haste; tell all who will listen, you are the martyr
in the life, you have begun.

I am plaintive, sickening the pit where you eat;
hurling my name, washing it down copper drains.
Actions played in your hands taste bitter;
leaving acid to build inside

I am pessimistic, my face erased with marker,
smudged in desperate fingers;
left inside worn clothes, given away without concern.
No second thought will be permitted.

I am gone

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The Lady
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there is a hollowness here Page
that begs to be filled

well done

Dominique-Simone
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2 posted 07-12-2007 08:33 PM       View Profile for Dominique-Simone   Email Dominique-Simone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dominique-Simone

Thank you Lady. You words are always encouraging
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wow

I can relate to this well

very deep and powerful write here
Dominique-Simone
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4 posted 07-12-2007 09:36 PM       View Profile for Dominique-Simone   Email Dominique-Simone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dominique-Simone

Passing, I am not sure it is a good thing that you can relate since this is very sad; however i am glad you liked this poem and felt something when you read it.

exhale
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5 posted 07-13-2007 01:21 AM       View Profile for exhale   Email exhale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for exhale

I agree that it is deep, but the way you've woven these words together spells hope to me, despite the topic.
Very well written, you definitely have a gift
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"I am gone" ~ You may feel as though you are gone, but your talent for writing certainly has not diminished!!!

Giving you a compassionate ~ and appreciative! ~ hug,

EA
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some cold stuff ms, nice way of building it
Kit McCallum
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I enjoyed the haunting and dark quality that you wove through this Dominique-Simone ... wonderful flow and imagery as well. Much enjoyed this.  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Dominique-Simone
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9 posted 07-13-2007 07:11 AM       View Profile for Dominique-Simone   Email Dominique-Simone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dominique-Simone

Exhale

Thank you I am glad you found hope within this
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Earth

I am happy that you enjoyed this.

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Kit

Nothing makes me smile more to know that I wrote a poem well enough that you get the picture that goes along with it

Thank you
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Dark yes it is a little sad
Thank you

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JamesMichael
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10 posted 07-14-2007 05:53 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This and something else I read reminded me of the time my ex-wife divorced me...and she told me that she had killed me off, and I no longer existed...
Words that cut into my heart...my fault for taking her to that place...still none the less painful to lose your family...James
Dominique-Simone
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11 posted 07-14-2007 05:55 PM       View Profile for Dominique-Simone   Email Dominique-Simone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dominique-Simone

The most painful part of loss, is the rejection.
Midnitesun
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12 posted 07-14-2007 06:28 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Reading this made me sigh,
"I was..."
and then a second sigh released itself from somewhere deep inside,
"Was I?"
Dominique-Simone
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Thank you mid.... I am happy to make you sigh... anytime.
Artic Wind
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Iam kind
i am sweet
i am nice
lol, my little poem for you lol

ARCTIC WIND
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