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Long, Lost, Goodbye

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Tomer
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0 posted 07-10-2007 08:30 PM       View Profile for Tomer   Email Tomer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tomer

The cathedral downstairs,
Away from the
Yellow, cut off wallpaper.

A lazy chair,
Back pedaled
At the back of the room,

He waits,
His cigar rests
At the tip of his mouth,
Breathing circles of smoke
In front of his blue peaked eyes.

He waits,
Glances down to his wrist,
His wooden strapped watch
String numbers together
As the arrow sits on midnight.

He spins the television on,
Rumbles the room with his cough,
As he places his cigar down
In his silver ashtray.

He stares at her photo,
Then at his wedding band,
He waits.


[This message has been edited by Tomer (07-10-2007 10:01 PM).]

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A Romantic Heart
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1 posted 07-11-2007 08:17 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

This is so sad...I hate Goodbyes!

J. M. Barrie, the playwright, may have said it best when he wrote, “God gave us memories so that we might have roses in December.”

LeeJ
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2 posted 07-11-2007 09:40 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

He waits,
His cigar rests
At the tip of his mouth,
Breathing circles of smoke
In front of his blue peaked eyes.


wonderfully done, however, this was my favorite description, although all were paramount....excellent read
aziza
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3 posted 07-11-2007 07:22 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

This is really well written.  I enjoyed it and see the picture you painted with your words.  And I feel the sadness as he waits - thank you.

Alison
Tomer
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4 posted 07-11-2007 08:02 PM       View Profile for Tomer   Email Tomer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tomer

Thank you all for the responses, happy you enjoyed.
Drauntz
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5 posted 07-12-2007 04:38 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

a beauty. deep flowing romance but sad kind.

enjoyed
nakdthoughts
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6 posted 07-12-2007 07:03 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I waited once, much longer than I should have.


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7 posted 07-12-2007 11:42 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



indeed Tomer
you tell a sad story
in sealed words

well done

Drauntz
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8 posted 07-14-2007 12:03 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

read again. Made myself sadder.  
Artic Wind
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9 posted 11-05-2007 03:58 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Good Bye lol


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