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serenity blaze
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0 posted 07-10-2007 07:26 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

I like the way
my hair curls round
my wrist
as though it were

some friendly

wish
clasping nearly wet
as I
like it
as I am the eye.

I am it:

I do submit:

curling in a curlicue
like a fish dead on one side
staring at you
staring blue
circles
trombone like it is
dead on one side
like a fish

frozen

grommets
like the truth
of sun
of sonnets
as if they
were done
in iambic pentameter:
wishing whining more of her

damned and distillationed wings
spattering the dancing sun
in a disk played on the park

whirling girly-gish-ma-h'yon--

dervished damned solidity
as if the war was done and won

to the best absurd.


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Drauntz
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1 posted 07-10-2007 01:18 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

I have to say that this is a marvelous piece.
no matter what you mean, it is a true poem. I read several times.

I will come back to read it again.

enjoyed very much

have a wonderful day, dear Lady SB
Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 07-10-2007 03:06 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

a wish and a dead fish...



probably the story of my life...

loved it Karen.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

aziza
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3 posted 07-11-2007 06:21 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

I loved reading this out loud.  Again and again.


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serenity blaze
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4 posted 07-11-2007 06:29 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thanks to the three of you, I really didn't expect too much of this one, as it was written for a friend who doesn't even read here.

But thanks aziza, as it was meant to be read out loud.

I like to play with words and sound a lot.



Love to all.
LeeJ
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5 posted 07-11-2007 06:55 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

there is as always a mystery behind the visions you present...and I love the challenge of them....their beauty and the feelings you give the reader....

awesome writing lady poetess
The Lady
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6 posted 07-12-2007 08:06 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



Karen
I read everything you write
with a green eye

my eye is green again
I love the way you play
with words and sounds
passing shadows
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7 posted 07-12-2007 09:14 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

very cool piece

divine chaos
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dancing 'neath the moon


8 posted 07-14-2007 08:23 AM       View Profile for divine chaos   Email divine chaos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for divine chaos

I love the way you play with words,
when I read you, I can see them
dancing 'round me

~sheli
iliana
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9 posted 07-15-2007 04:03 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

I could tell you were playing with words and sound here; you do that so well...liked the rhythm here, too.  I think you experiment worked because I felt a little dizzy at the end...not kidding.  (Of course, it's late and I'm pretty easy to spin around at 3 am in the morning *grins*.)  I wish that darn war was over, too.  *hugs*.....jojo
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


10 posted 11-05-2007 04:04 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

funky title
lol

ARCTIC WIND
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11 posted 04-24-2010 03:03 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

Once more around.
 
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