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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2007-07-06 07:07 AM



the back door is lovely wood
sometimes it is a woman warm
leaning to my back lonely
wanting my hands to touch hinges

and then the window winks
sultry in her whispering mist
exposing more than she should
but she knows my eyes are hungry

and the floor with promises
of tiptoe secrets hidden under
she says it is ok for me to be there
long as I recline with her fibers

and then the ceiling grinning down
watching the unraveling of proper
as lady and gentleman are discarded
and man and woman appear restless

to writhe where the wall women whisper


_____________

daark



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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2007-07-06 07:21 AM


I so enjoyed reading between the lines and layers of this one D.  Oh yes, if houses could talk, what stories they would tell.  You sir, have incredible talent.  Possibly, your best ever.  
Sunshine
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2 posted 2007-07-06 07:55 AM


listen to the lilt of this
alliteratively lovely last line...

warm chills...all over.

Wonderful!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2007-07-06 08:38 AM


delicious Mr Daark...   RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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with you
4 posted 2007-07-06 09:45 AM


oh to be a wall in your house.... the things that would be seen....

I really enjoyed this, you can turn such simple things into living breathing, heart beating things.

Dominique-Simone
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5 posted 2007-07-06 10:11 AM


Of course I enjoyed this, you are a great poet.
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2007-07-06 05:51 PM


ms donna, thank you babe.

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ms sun, thank you for the read and touch

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ms r&b thank you for the moments of eye time

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ms suesea, me casa is such a naughty casa..with a welcome mat too, thanks babe

____________

ms domsi' you smile me with your reads and comments, and your art is amazing, thanks ms

The Lady
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7 posted 2007-07-07 05:05 PM




"as lady and gentleman are discarded
and man and woman appear restless"

oh those windows of yours
stranger darlin'

and
oh those words of yours

aziza
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8 posted 2007-07-07 07:29 PM


Something about this made my heart homesick.

Rick
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9 posted 2007-07-07 08:05 PM


This felt very tense and sinful, between the lines were such images, want and lust, need and trust, human, animal, each line held moments and the moments I lived.
Wonderful work here daark, enjoyed.

Rick

Magnus
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10 posted 2007-07-07 08:14 PM


Definitely one of your good ones..You have
such a gift for writing in a style that only
you can give to us...Thanx!!

1slick_lady
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11 posted 2007-07-07 08:54 PM


every time i read you i feel as if i need a shower
giggle

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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12 posted 2007-07-08 04:19 AM


the back door is lovely wood
sometimes it is a woman warm
leaning to my back lonely
wanting my hands to touch hinges

come back for another read Mr Daark... these opening lines touch me..   RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2007-07-08 07:40 AM


ladyone, thanks ladyfriend for the eyes

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ms az, may your heart be healed with gentle sighs, thank you

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Rick, thanks for the read my friend

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magnus, it is a pleasure to have your review sir, thank you


____________

slick one, may I join you under the rain?  thanks babe!!


___________

ms r&b, would always want you to come back
again for more, thanks ms

Aloneinmyhead
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14 posted 2007-07-08 10:13 AM


All I can say is WOW.
Martie
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15 posted 2007-07-08 06:00 PM


Hi DS

I think if I were going to be part of a house, I would be a window....one that opened and closed so I could enter and leave when I wanted to.

I like this!

Dark Stranger
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16 posted 2007-07-08 09:30 PM


alone, thank you

__________

martie, thanks little neighbor

ladylisa
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17 posted 2007-07-10 11:02 AM


Each time I read your work I see something new in the words.  Amazing talent Dark Stranger, truly gifted!!!!!  
Klassy Lassy
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18 posted 2007-07-10 04:13 PM


Still counting flowers on the wall... shadow dancing of course!  ....   
Dark Stranger
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19 posted 2007-07-10 06:08 PM


ladylisa, thanks for the blessing..just a humble ol penspeaker though

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ms kl, thanks lady friend for the eyes

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