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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2007-07-06 04:31 AM


* * *

Patience

"Do you feel me now?"
A breeze is blowing from Nor'east
and sheers are blustering our needs:
"Tell me, do you feel me now?"

I smell coffee.
I smell need.
Eyelet cotton
on the sheets
I meet your eyes meet mine in greet:
"Tell me do you know me now?"
I lick my lips. I hear the tide.
I trace my fingers on your back--
I feel you curl you're "you" of mine

patience

as I lick your lack...


Urgency

as I, again,

take your gentles

in between

red lips longing for a stream:

patience, patience

hungrily

aching in the feed of this:

~lovely~lovely~

~loveliness~

"Do you feel me now?"

murmer:

"Do you feel me now?"


Breaking

in the arch of greed

and

NOW

oh-now-oh-now-oh-now


and then:

I bit him, and impatiently

"That's it!"

(it is)

I suckled:

"Yes, it is, it's me"

in

the  

need

as my knees were shuddering

thighs of bicker

quivering

restless in the dark of me:

"Do you feel me now...?"

I leaned

into tomorrow, yesterday,

pounding with my bad bad ways:

"I think you feel me now."

* * * * *



© Copyright 2007 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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Posts 13989

1 posted 2007-07-06 06:06 AM


whoa lady, again you have rocked these pages of blue with your incredible talent.  Much enjoyed this one K.  
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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Sydney, Australia
2 posted 2007-07-06 06:47 AM


Wow!!!  Serenity, your writing is awesome!
RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2007-07-06 06:56 AM


sitting here looking at the strawberry fields...wondering where your mind goes..
and how it comes back without muddy shoes

enjoyed you ms serene

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
4 posted 2007-07-06 07:01 AM


Dear SB. beautiful. You are, after all, a very romantic poet.

have a very good sleep and a wonderful next day!!

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
5 posted 2007-07-06 08:42 PM


Awesome, Serenity, simply awesome.
passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2007-07-06 08:45 PM


very passionate

outstanding work

dgvarner
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7 posted 2007-07-06 09:43 PM


Yes girl!  That's a good one...!!!

enjoyed...more than once...!

hugs, g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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8 posted 2007-07-07 02:13 AM


I'll have what you're having.
Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2007-07-07 08:26 AM


Wow ... I'm not sure I've got that much patience ... you should have seen how quickly I read that, lol.

Well done Karen, very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Jaime Fradera
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Where no tyranny is tolerable
10 posted 2007-07-07 03:16 PM


O, how I would long to be with Karen!
But, of course,
all of us will have to share,
so that each of us can come to know.
How could she have known
my most intimate and secret thoughts,
which I have never shared with anyone?
Or is it just imagination?
I will keep this for a LONG, long time,
for nights where I can play pretend,
and fantasize that someone wants me ...


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
11 posted 2007-07-07 03:44 PM



Applauding the poem...

and smiling at the replies...

you just continue to...

outdo.




The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
12 posted 2007-07-07 05:35 PM




"as my knees were shuddering

thighs of bicker

quivering"


ouch!
this hurts so good Karen!

you have an amazing talent
and I am envious

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2007-07-07 07:58 PM


The pleasure was all mine.



Thank you all very kindly for indulging me yet again.

and Jaime?

Martie
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14 posted 2007-07-08 06:05 PM


Karen....you peel the skin back, then lay down with what's under it.  Wheew!  
Jaime Fradera
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since 2000-11-25
Posts 843
Where no tyranny is tolerable
15 posted 2007-07-12 08:43 PM


Yessssssssssss!
It is the middle of the night here on Pleasure Island, what with all the time zones and stuff,
but it tells me that in the realm of soul,
I sleep with you.
:-----)

divine chaos
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dancing 'neath the moon
16 posted 2007-07-14 08:27 AM


wow ... just .. wow
my dear, you are amazing *smiles*
I'm with Kate,
I read you with a green eye

~Sheli

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
17 posted 2007-11-05 03:55 PM


enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

Cpat Hair
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18 posted 2010-10-07 02:07 PM


yes, amazing... is one of the words I use to describe your writes..
but only one...of many

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