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Open Poetry #40

Anna's Pain

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2007-07-06 12:17 PM

Anna with her lips,
Thin, pale skin,
Leaving her face
Through the pins
Of my skins
Steel penchant

Of dances
That leave my
Feet watching
From the bottom
Of their back
Curved bottom paths.

Her lies,
Its sweet,
Walking with
My eyes closed
Pearl chest.

She drifts,
I sit,
Splitting my hairs
Into a layer so thick,
It sits next to me,
Waiting, and waiting…

Anna with apologies,
Anna with her story,

Without me knowing.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2007-07-06 02:26 AM

Wow.

Like vignettes, but more like fingernails drifting sweetly--

I'm smiling, because I like the place this took you...

a breeze....

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-07-06 06:50 AM

Nice writing...James

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

3 posted 2007-07-07 11:30 PM

Very beautiful.

A

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

4 posted 2007-07-07 11:31 PM

Very beautiful.

A

Aloneinmyhead
Junior Member

since 2007-07-08

Posts 30
Tennessee

5 posted 2007-07-08 10:23 AM

I feel a bot of sadness. BUt it is lovely

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

6 posted 2007-07-11 10:42 PM

Truly beautiful

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

7 posted 2007-07-12 05:32 PM

Thank you for the responses...happy you all enjoyed.

Tomer

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