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Open Poetry #40

Unfinished Business

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

0 posted 2007-07-04 01:34 AM

Why do you not believe
that these
are the thoughts I conceived?
Is it because of my age that you feel
I am one that you shall not be minding?
Yet you can not say which,
for all that I speak is spellbinding.

Your mouth is agape, and your mind
spellbound.
You see it takes 40 muscles to frown,
and now I must continue to fast
from having my head down.
No longer shall my eyes follow my tears
to the ground.
There is no tearing me apart from what
I have found.

It' s time to say yes to saying no.
It's time to stop thinking, and
time to know
who I am
and to grow as a person,
because I am not a cactus in dry sand.

When I realize my full potentiality
there will be no limit
except for the speeding ones I pass,
but I would not have noticed them
because I would be going to fast
at only 40 miles an hour
smiling.

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

1 posted 2007-07-04 01:45 AM

It' s time to say yes to saying no.

You are so right with this comment my friend, a very well constructed poem with much meaning and insight.

Thank you for sharing.

Rick

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

2 posted 2007-07-04 01:47 AM

You are very welcome Rick. I'm glad you liked it. Gee, you're so well mannered.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
Blessings and Guidance

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

3 posted 2007-07-04 07:56 AM

I love the strength I feel from this piece! These lines in particular will stay with me today.

"No longer shall my eyes follow my tears
to the ground.
There is no tearing me apart from what
I have found."

Great work here.

Patricia

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

4 posted 2007-07-04 02:10 PM

Thank you Patricia for your comments. I am glad I was able to write something that will stick with you throughout your life. If my poetry can help people, then it serves a purpose.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
Blessings and Guidance

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