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MarkG
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since 2007-06-21
Posts 48
California USA

0 posted 2007-07-03 11:45 PM



cell

unbendable bars
dim and falling stars
the winter chills
warmer where you are

lyrics of a new poem
lie crumpled on the floor
unable to find the words
to write of this no more

a candle on the wall
begging more and more for life
losing its steady burn
losing its winless fight

shadows move across the room
knowing of the time
the end of all
the war of it
never will I find

in a cell of my own making
having lost the will to fight
thinking of the final words
I know I need to write

© Copyright 2007 Mark Gammill - All Rights Reserved
Rick
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia
1 posted 2007-07-04 12:39 PM


Just keep writing Mark, I as well feel I am in a cell at times waiting for the matching rhymes, so I read and little learn, it's then another poem I earn.

Enjoyed my friend.

Rick

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2007-07-04 07:17 AM


You've captured a deep, dark mood of isolation well here Mark. The visuals of the candles with the shadows creeping through enhance this well. Very much enjoyed this.

Best wishes,
/Kit

MarkG
Junior Member
since 2007-06-21
Posts 48
California USA
3 posted 2007-07-04 02:47 PM


Thank you so much Rick and Kit
I really appreciate it
the positive words so nice to hear
about a writer's thoughts and fear

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