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Drauntz
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0 posted 2007-07-03 03:12 PM



I see you come
You come sweetly into my eyes
in such a seceret sigh

From faraway
Passing through the stare of the stars
Young and old
Did you say hello to them?
Did you bring me their regards?
How you escape from the tongue of the ogre
How do you avoid those greedy hand?
now, tell me,
my love
The story of the first ray
the very beginning of the light
who enticed you to smile a universe
in hydrogen?
or in Une?

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2007-07-05 09:27 PM


I saw this loved one as the sun...lovely feel to this write. Enjoyed the read.

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2007-07-06 03:22 AM


"who enticed you to smile a universe"

Loved that.  Sometimes things just come naturally.

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2007-07-06 09:06 AM


You have illustrated that there can be such a thing as poetry in science! Right brain meets left! lol

Uniquely exquisite!

Love & Light,

EA



Rick
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4 posted 2007-07-06 09:23 AM


Drauntz, you could be speaking of God here dear friend or alien love, great wording, i was captured till the ending, thanks for sharing.

Rick

Dominique-Simone
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5 posted 2007-07-06 10:21 AM


This was brilliant!
The Lady
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6 posted 2007-07-07 05:27 PM



you have taken me past the stars with this
Drauntz

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2007-07-08 12:54 PM


To the top...James
serenity blaze
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8 posted 2007-07-08 03:17 AM


you make me smile, Mz. D

(and yeah, I'm out of kiwi...)

Brava

aziza
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9 posted 2007-07-08 03:26 AM


I like this, Drauntz.
Very good .. and interesting.

A

Larry C
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10 posted 2007-07-08 03:24 PM


Drauntz,
Flying high, indeed.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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