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Prayer from a Firefighter's Wife

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dgvarner
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0 posted 07-01-2007 10:03 AM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for dgvarner

(With the recent deaths of the 9 firefighters in my hometown, Charleston SC, just down the street from where I used to work, my poet got a kick in the heart to finish this one for my husband..)


Lord, keep my Angel safe tonight
Where peril may be great
Lend him strength to break through fire
Keep his halo straight

Help him Lord, to fly courageous
Keep him sure of foot
He’ll need your guidance in the dark
In blinding smoke and soot

Should his wings get blackened there
In fire’s ferocity
Wrap your arms around his shoulders
Lead him through hell’s fury

I love him Lord, he rescued me
From some uncertain truths
He brought me out of personal fire
And showed me Love’s own proof

Please watch his back, but grasp his hand
He’ll have no time for doubt
If the flames should pull him in
I beg you, pull him out!

But if in flight he meets such plight
And you gather him from ashen floor
Whisper gently my love for him
As you carry him through Heaven’s door…

© Copyright 2007 dgvarner - All Rights Reserved


[This message has been edited by dgvarner (07-02-2007 11:23 PM).]

© Copyright 2007 dgvarner - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-01-2007 01:15 PM       View Profile for Robert Jordan   Email Robert Jordan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Robert Jordan's Home Page   View IP for Robert Jordan

Dgvarner,

The thought is there, however, some of the lines come out a little forced.

Bobby
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Nice writing...wonderful thoughts from your heart...James
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What a beautiful thought contained within these lines. Just by tweeking a word or two throughout to smooth out the meter a bit would make this piece absolutely perfect My hat is off to these me who put on that uniform and risk their lives for people they often don't even know
Ruth
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4 posted 07-01-2007 07:46 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

ROBERT~ uhm...thanks?

JAMES~ Thanks a bunch!

RUTH~ Thanks..I appreciate your comments!

I started this in a rhyme, so I had to finish it that way--however, I'll have to admit, I'm a free-verse junkie...I find it difficult to pen all the words piling up in my head while I'm flipping through that same space for the perfect rhyme! I rather liken it to 'condom sex' (LOL); so many words rushing through but they're unable to get out due to the poet's 'safety net' of rhyme!

hugs, g

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5 posted 07-01-2007 08:19 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Denise, ...  being a Summerville resident,
I guess I was about 20 miles away from where
the fire was....The TriCounty area was deeply
saddened and affected by the loss of 9 who
most certainly should be called heroes...for
it took great courage to do what they had
done.

Thanx for what you have given us....either
way, free verse or rhyme is perfectly okay
by me....I do know the feeling and it tugs
at me a little bit, just as it does you
and Ruth.

PS:  You have been missed~!~
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wow, it's lady Varner! So good to see you, though it's such a tragic event that  inspired you to post again.
May your husband stay in safety's hands.
dg, please visit more often

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-01-2007 09:32 PM).]

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Hi dg!

Pretty good for a "free-verse junkie".
Now that you have gotten it out this way you are free to do a free-verse version.

I don't do structural fires, but I've done enough "wild-land" to understand.  Always a risk.

(Good to see you here!)

e
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This is very nice. Always great to pay tribute to and acknowledge those who serve.

Dinah
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Your poem was finished in divine time!
~ When it would be most needed and appreciated.

The loss of those 9 firefighters, was felt deeply up here north of the 49th parallel, as well. Your beautifully expressed poem of heartfelt sentiments, brought the tears welling up in my eyes again.

May bands of angels protect all those who serve and protect. Be they police, the military, or our firefighters.

Your pen ~ and your lovely spirit ~ have been missed!

Giving you a loving, welcome-back hug,

Linda

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10 posted 07-02-2007 09:55 AM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

dgvarner...A beautiful prayer for your husband. It is said all things come to those who wait and this poem is a testement to that, you waited till the words were given to you from above in order to finish this masterpiece. Thanks for sharing with us...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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MIDNITESUN~ Thanks!  It's good to be here again!!  Every few months I just have to come back..lol

e~ Hey there friend! Thanks for stopping by my poem...Always good to hear from you! You still do wild-land?

DINAH~ Thank you!

LINDA~ Most appreciate your comments!  Thank you much for the welcome-back hug!!

PAUL~ Thank you so much--And like your 'signature' says, this poem is me sharing my heart!!

hugs, g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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dg... so nice to see your pen at work with such a loving piece. I hope this prayer is always answered for you.

Parker
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DG~
You did a WONDERFUL job on this, gal~

Touching, tender ... so you~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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g

it's the feelings that count
and this counts for quite a lot
dgvarner
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PARKER~ Can't tell you how good it is to hear from you...   Thank you for your reply--I hope that prayer is always answered too...

MARGIE~ Thanks so much for your encouragement!!  much appreciated!

LADY~ Thank you...

hugs, g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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Maybe you 'tweeked' this since you first posted it because I think it is wonderful.

I think that the readers also have a responsiblity to place emphasis on syllables to make poems 'work' .. and when I read your poem aloud to myself (twice) it worked wonderfully to me.

You moved me to tears.  I wish your husband safe days always - and I think your tribute is one of the most moving pieces of writing that I have read in some time.

Kudos and thoughts to you,
Alison
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It is a lovely and moving prayer.

"He brought me out of personal fire
And showed me Love’s own proof"

For that act alone he is deserving of protection.
dgvarner
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18 posted 07-03-2007 10:48 AM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

ALISON~ Nope...no tweeking was done around here...lol  thank you so much for being able to read it as I read it!  Much appreciate your encouragement!

HONEYBUNCH~ Yes he is...lol  He's a good somebody!  thanks a bunch for your reply...

, g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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My thoughts have often brushed past you... didn't you hear them.

dgvarner
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20 posted 07-03-2007 10:18 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

PARKER~ Was that you, dear poet? So good to have your thoughts brush my poet soul!

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

aziza
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Just came back to tell you that I have read this to several family members and friends -- they wanted me to tell you how moved they are and that they wish you and your family the best.

Happy 4th

A
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22 posted 07-04-2007 12:35 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

ALISON~  You're the coolest!  Tell the fam TY for me!

hugs, g
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Please watch his back, but grasp his hand
He’ll have no time for doubt
If the flames should pull him in
I beg you, pull him out!

But if in flight he meets such plight
And you gather him from ashen floor
Whisper gently my love for him
As you carry him through Heaven’s door…

The love in these lines is so tender... it brings tears!!! I think anyone who loves someone who regularly faces his own mortality so that others can be saved would find you've written their heart! *S*
dgvarner
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24 posted 07-11-2007 03:31 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

SUTHERN~ thanks so much for your reply...if I have brought tears then I have reached your heart...and that means I've succeeded in sharing my own!!  

hugs, g


"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."
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