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adagio
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0 posted 2007-06-27 03:42 PM



The lady in the fountain
Trudging forth,my eyes full of sun
all my work is not yet done
sweating grossly, mile after mile
wishing I could find a smile

Got to find a shorter route
feels like there's water in my boots
maybe I could use a rest
set down my load for just a spell
maybe this is all a test
can I ring that magical bell

Something up ahead I see
I'm not sure what it could be
seems like something I might need
maybe something good for me

closer,closer I approach
cauciosly at first I go
now I see her batheing there
in her fountain full of snow

She waved me in
with her sweet grin
and how could I resist?

could I say no ?
to cooling snow?
'twas she that did insist

Gently she did bathe me
tanderly she cooled me
Then she learned to rule me
she showed me where to go

The lady in the fountain
on a hot and humid day
she lifted my cares away
just long enough forever!

Adagio

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Drauntz
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1 posted 2007-06-27 03:45 PM


how beautiful. and romantic.


enjoyed.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2007-06-27 05:02 PM


It's about time! *grin*

You did a great job with this (although you could have dropped by today and I would have "proofed" it for you!--just some typos/spelling errors--see "cautiously" and "bathing")

But I'm really glad that you took your time, as the extra thought shows in your work. You took a great idea for a theme, and I very much enjoyed what you did with this'n.

Give my love to Leah too.

A Romantic Heart
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3 posted 2007-06-27 06:28 PM


magical and romantic..

~ARH

LeeJ
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4 posted 2007-06-27 07:57 PM


just long enough forever

ohhh sighs...how utterly beautiful!

adagio
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5 posted 2007-06-28 10:14 AM


Thanks to all for reading and responding!

Speceal note to Karen;
I will most likely have my own computer in my own home by next week!
this means no more trips to the library
and no more imposing on friends.

speceal thanks to Karen and Mike.

you may be hearing more from me in the near future!

adagio
p.s. Leah says Hi!

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2007-06-28 02:24 PM


Hmm, on a hot summer's day like this one, I wouldn't mind having a man in a fountain for my own cooling pleasure.

Loved the ethereal quality of this write.

Adios & Adieu, Adagio


EA

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2007-06-28 03:20 PM


Well, congratulations! But I'm gonna miss your beautiful roses. *pout*

(Did Mike get roses too? I'm thinking he prefers his buds "weiser", eh? )

You be a good boy with your new toy, now!


adagio
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8 posted 2007-06-28 04:55 PM


Be good I shall have to
Garrett,(Leah's son) is a computer consultant at WJH. He is going to BUILD me a computer.

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