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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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behind my mind with soft sounds I heard your voice often always quieter than the rest who were pleased to be brassy I tried to associate eyes before I met yours face to corner and imagined green or amber with year around lightening but yours just peeked upwards waiting to be invited to laughter like a virgin before her gown standing at a stranger's window you must have read my mind then as I turned to hurry somewhere before I had to explain my hands folded that way suggesting prayer for something perhaps ungodly _____________ daark |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Have mercy man... D this just touches... right there.  What I have loved so much about reading you is that even now, after all of this time I still see something new in your words each time I read and I still learn so much from the way that you write. If you'd bind it all up in some really awesome worn out leather, I'd buy it baby. 
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 I'd pay for it too  "but yours just peeked upwards waiting to be invited to laughter" |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
oh, this makes me smile... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your writing is like a fine Bordeaux ~ It gets even better with the passing of time!   EA |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"behind my mind with soft sounds I heard your voice often always quieter than the rest" dang, that is snuggly warm |
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kateyezz New Member
since 2007-06-23
Posts 2 |
~warm smile~ that truly was so beautiful to read ~skoyc~ |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
good. enjoyed |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Wonderful Mr Daark.... just wonderful! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
but yours just peeked upwards waiting to be invited to laughter I hope when she was done peeking -- she laughed from the depth of her belly, head back, relishing the joy of the moment. You know, this poem is incredible. I read it once and thought it was -- and then thought .. nah, it ain't that damned good! (grins) So, I came back to read it 40 or 50 more times -- And I was flat out wrong. It IS that good. Yep, it is. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
you guys just ruin me with your comments..I sit here and grin and then feel sad that I can't thank you each with a face to face with a handshake or hug and tell you how you make my day rise from the humble darkness to the bright light of wonder...thank you so much. Ms donna, bless you babe. ____________ suesea, you make me want candy again, thank you ________________ ms kahlil, thanks for the soft touch _____________ ms EA, and you like fine wine too...dayyymmmnnn, thank you ms _______________________ suesea, again you unravel me, thanks babe, and the cost is so very minimal..well maybe _____________ kateyezz, it is a pleasure to feel you close, thanks ms ____________ Drauntz, thank you for the read. _____________ ms R&B, thanks you for reaching up from there and touching _____________ ms az, babe, you sizzle me with your comments, thank you for being here. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
 D, m'friend, what is given to others can not help but to be returned. It is a continual circle. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"yours just peeked upwards waiting to be invited to laughter" Nothing beats the anticipation of receiving such an eyeful. |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Dark Stranger, I couldn't figure out what this line meant: "before I met yours face to corner" Bobby |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...minding your comment... be ruined then... because this is how you leave all of us... ruined, and wanting more. Goodness, DS... and here I am near the heart of Texas, and NOW you make it swelter! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms gs, thanks babe _______________________ ms midnight, you bless me thank you ______________________ robert..it is the coy side eye glance of the lady when the man is looking her direction..thanks for the read _________________ ms sun, texas is lucky, thanks lady friend |
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