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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2007-06-25 04:53 AM


Making Love Die

I don't care
to live in your
lie anymore.

No I don't.
No I don't.
No I won't.

Deception and lies
have a way of
making love die.

Now I know
I must go.
Now I know
that I don't
care to share
in a lie.

No I don't.
No I don't.
No I won't.

JamesLee
24June
2007



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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
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1 posted 2007-06-25 06:04 AM


For such a brief poem, this hits with a whallop, James. I liked the repetition and short lines. Well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2007-06-25 09:16 AM


James, not only did your words have impact, but the manner in which you laid them down, did as well!

"Deception and lies
have a way of
making love die."

~ Thatsa fersure!

Hugs to you,

Linda


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2007-06-25 09:03 PM


so true! You said it! Amen to that!



honesty is always the best policy!


Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
4 posted 2007-06-25 09:38 PM


very good. The first time of a negative love poem. show strong feelings.

gooood

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23
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On A Journey To The Unknown
5 posted 2007-06-25 10:32 PM


I sure understand this. This is so true.
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