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A Beautiful Disaster
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0 posted 2007-06-22 07:34 AM


Without You

I know that sometimes it happens -
We part at the dawn of my love.
My heart's going on, but without you
When all of that pretty love is gone.

Still dreaming, I look through the window,
The snow melts, falling to the ground.
But how can my love melt so suddenly?
It seems to be everywhere around.

And everything around remembers you,
Without you the world for me is dead.
Convincing myself I've forgotten you
Is lying - I just can't forget

Your voice, so soft, and your eyes, so deep,
Those songs and so beautiful words...
You opened the new, never seen world for me,
And now I can't stay in this world.

No, I won't cry, my tears are nothing for you,
I know you're not worthy of it.
I've got to pretend it's not painful to fall,
But my heart's still ready to forgive.

But destiny knows the story of us,
And we know we're of different blood.
The only salvation for us is to part,
We both can't live through my love...



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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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1 posted 2007-06-22 08:09 AM


beautifully bittersweet
sad
painful
lonliness in the rough

well done

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
2 posted 2007-06-22 09:28 PM


powerfully emotive 'write'!

especially fine ending:

"The only salvation for us is to part,
We both can't live through my love..."

Applause!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2007-06-22 09:45 PM


wow

this one aches

I love it!

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2007-06-25 04:45 AM


Lots of feelings here...James
MyEnchanted_Melody
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since 2001-05-30
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
5 posted 2007-06-25 07:26 AM



nicely done...

Thank you

A Beautiful Disaster
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6 posted 2007-06-25 09:56 AM


Thank a lot, I'm glad you like it.
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