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Martie
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0 posted 2007-06-21 01:28 PM



Air moves slowly through the open door
then begs the corner of my eye
to watch

as a small thread from a spider's web
turns into a gold chain even as I look away
feeling like I can't bear to know
how fragile this one thing is
and how carelessly it can be destroyed

but I have already seen it
connecting the wooden door frame
to the bookcase

where in one corner
a book is wrapped up in patient silk
sewn up so tight
lace fingers of it
hold its pages in place

I see a fluff of feather there
caught fast by the delicate strings
cast across the air
and taken by the sun
like a piece of art holding mighty
a drift from a molting summer bird

I watch a hammock swing
macraméd and filled gracefully with wind
then set on fire with sunlight
and I am captured in the whim

that it is marking a path
to the place of bare feet
and the sound of summer's children in the yard
gone too soon and replaced with slamming car doors
and crows quarreling in the shadows of morning

How slowly air moves into the voices of the trees

Over my shoulder I sense time moving
made from the slipping of summer
even as I turn
wanting to catch
the first squeal
from a cool-down sprinkler's child

and only find the sound of leaves

[This message has been edited by Martie (06-21-2007 09:53 PM).]

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Drauntz
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1 posted 2007-06-21 03:22 PM


truly beautiful. and a cool summer scene.

enjoyed.

passing shadows
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2 posted 2007-06-21 08:46 PM


very touching piece Martie

yes, this touches me
deeply

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2007-06-21 09:36 PM


Ohhhhh Martie .. I have missed reading you!

This whole piece is so delicately woven with visuals sprinkled so vividly throughout ... it just takes my breath away. Beautiful, truly.

Best wishes and big hugs,
/Kit

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4 posted 2007-06-21 10:13 PM


The leaves that one turns
over time and tales,
says much, if not only to us,
than to anyone who studies ear-marks
of our libraries

after our passing.

Summer is a wonderful time to read,
as is any other term...

but that we do, says even more.

for the feathers.


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5 posted 2007-06-22 06:20 AM


very touching write Martie, and I love you use of imagery. You have such a way with words m'friend. I so enjoy reading you.
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6 posted 2007-06-22 08:17 AM


How slowly air moves into the voices of the trees

Over my shoulder I sense time moving
made from the slipping of summer
even as I turn
wanting to catch
the first squeal
from a cool-down sprinkler's child

and only find the sound of leaves
Martie, Martie, oh how I love reading your fabric of lexicons which tingles so so many imagines to come alive...sound, sight, taste and touch, become brilliant words that stimulate...and you make life come alive...filled with events, footnoting everything, every mood, every feeling, both good and bad, which we understand is out of our control....

good to read you lady, very good to read you!




Earth Angel
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7 posted 2007-06-22 08:38 AM


You watch and listen ~ now I can see and hear.

Your powers of observation are outstanding and you convey them into poetry of the finest that there be.

May this new season be a joyful one!

Love & Summer Light,

Linda




Titia Geertman
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8 posted 2007-06-22 10:40 AM


Spider webs are gorgeous in a breeze of golden sun. Oh how I relate to your words.
Thanks.

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

paullallady
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9 posted 2007-06-22 11:15 AM


What amazing, beautiful imagery you have painted with your words.
ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2007-06-24 03:22 PM


So delicate the fine threads that hold our lives to the earth.  I thought this one beautiful read MartieWord.  Oh, still moving with the soft warm air of this.
jwesley
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11 posted 2007-06-24 05:36 PM


really, really enjoyed this my friend, but absolutely loved the open lines...

jwesley

Goodknight
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12 posted 2007-06-25 03:58 PM


Martie - you paint images in my mind that make me breathless.  You are the best!
latearrival
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13 posted 2007-06-25 04:21 PM


Martie, I came back twice to read this and had to finally respond. Lovely words written by a beautiful lady. thank you. martyjo
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14 posted 2007-06-25 07:46 PM


Martie, this is absolutely gorgeous, spun golden words of pure poetry!
Once again, you've allowed your reader to see the delicate threads of life through your keen eyesight, and you've revealed far more than you perhaps know, in those moments of suspended animation.
The essence of life itself is caught within your finely woven handfuls of silken words.

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15 posted 2007-06-25 08:08 PM


absolutely wonderful...this 'write' is definitively 'as good as it gets'!

long sustained poetic 'standing ovation'!!

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16 posted 2007-06-26 01:15 AM


That haunting sense that something is missing, and you can't come to a clear notion of what it might be....there's a song in that, and I'd like to sing it, as well as you have.

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