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Open Poetry #40

The White Van

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2007-06-19 11:39 AM

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The white van
Pulls up into the parking lot
She gets out the morning’s light
On her long red hair

The summer sky
Above the sea is blue on blue
Sparrows are chirping
In the trees

She turns smiles
And waves to him
Seems so genuinely glad
That they are here

Together Perhaps
There had been a gap
In the space time continuum
A slip by some small degree

And for a moment
However briefly
One found himself
In an alternative reality

Where suddenly
Without warning
He was happy

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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2007-06-19 01:29 PM

you sure can capture these moments of life so well

I love your powers of observation and story-telling

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

2 posted 2007-06-19 02:10 PM

"The white van
Pulls up into the parking lot
She gets out the morning’s light
On her long red hair"

I read this as Sun rising above cloud. thrilling beauty.

and the left poem and the last S.

Happiness is not from begging. It is a blessing. you are so wonderful to put into a poem.

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

3 posted 2007-06-19 05:03 PM

Very stunning imagery

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2007-06-20 08:03 AM

Nice...James

lacydee
Member

since 2007-06-17

Posts 130
Indiana

5 posted 2007-06-20 11:09 AM

I liked this one. Very smooth and easy to read. Dee

as for me and my house, we will serve the Lord.

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