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Winter Butterfly
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since 2007-02-03
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The hidden path beyond the ivy gate.

0 posted 2007-06-15 11:14 PM



Whisper my name
Brush past me softly
Drown in my eyes
Warm and defiant
Challenge me to lose
Our game of ego
To say yes this time
Then go home


Shower it all away
The impulses to draw close
To look for me in a glance
Cleanse yourself of scent
As it washes over your memory
Blind yourself to my knowing smile
My voice caressing your imagination

At last when the room is nothing but steam
Know that I won
    and...
Remember to forget me


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Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
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1 posted 2007-06-15 11:36 PM


wow, you write beautifully.

it is a whisper. soft and quiet.

enjoyed happily

Winter Butterfly
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since 2007-02-03
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The hidden path beyond the ivy gate.
2 posted 2007-06-16 11:05 AM


Thank you very much Drauntz.

~Winter~

"I used to worry what people thought of me, then I broke through my cacoon"

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2007-06-17 09:04 PM


Wow this was like a sauna after a spa - very refreshing that lingers as a pleasant memory after the steam is gone. Very well done.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
4 posted 2007-06-17 09:09 PM


sis, those last lines got me...but you knew that

love ya

Winter Butterfly
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since 2007-02-03
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The hidden path beyond the ivy gate.
5 posted 2007-07-01 07:41 PM


Thank you Kethry. It  seems it is the first in what has become a dangerous mini series.
Sis I'm glad you enjoyed it. Love ya much.

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