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Poetic Revelation |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Dear Gentle Readers ( I have always wanted to write that. Isn't it sweet - a bit cloying, but sweet.) This poem is not directed to any person within PiP. It is written about a real life situation, using poetry as way to express feelings I wanted to release. Thank you. A --- Poetic Revelation I once wanted you to like me I once wanted you to care I shared my deepest feelings But, still, you just weren’t there I once wrote in a different style I once tried many different ways But no matter how much I grew Silence was all you had to say I once read works of poetic masters I once put myself to every test I framed my heart with paper rhymes I continued to put forth my very best I woke as if from a writer’s dream I read every printed page Something was sorely lacking It’s as if I had lost my way I sat and thought about it Of all the words that we have shared Sometimes you just were clueless You don’t see how much I cared My poems were sounding empty The stark pages were way too white Each line is a part of who I am Perhaps it is me who you don’t like Actually, it no longer really matters Honestly, I no longer really care I thought I didn’t like how I wrote But hey! It’s you I can not bear I now write to fill my desires I now write to learn and stretch and grow Sometimes I rhyme, sometimes I don’t I write to share and not for show Alison [This message has been edited by aziza (06-13-2007 10:49 PM).] |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
To gain respect from those we love we have to be ourselves and trite as it sounds, "To your own self be true". "Too late we learn". Enjoying your writing, martyjo |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Alison, no matter how much we strive to write like the masters or with correct form/style, the one thing I also have learned, is writing is always best when coming from the heart. This is lovely A. Well done. Hugs. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Not only have you used your poetry as a way to release emotions as you mentioned Alison ... but you've done it very well. This had a lovely flow to it ... and the message is one many of us here can appreciate. Much enjoyed.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
now you are talkin little one..enjoyed |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
beautiful. You always write well. enjoyed as always. |
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MegMeg Member
since 2007-05-14
Posts 85Virginia |
glad you're writting for you now instead of for others, it's very nice you really protrayed your emotions. |
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MIcountrygirl79 Junior Member
since 2007-06-13
Posts 16Michigan, USA |
Loved it! We all could benefit from a little "reality check" every so often... Your poem reminds me that I may be a bit overdue  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad I didn't miss this!  |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you all for reading. It felt really good to write. Know what I mean? Sometimes it just feels so good to put it out there in a poem. I am appreciating you all as fellow PiP writers - and am happy to be among you. Again, thank you. A |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting, thought-provoking ‘write’! I particularly admire: the line: “I woke ... from a writer’s dream” and: “I now write to fill my desires I now write to learn and stretch and grow” As well as: “I once read works of poetic masters I once put myself to every test I framed my heart with paper rhymes…” applause!! |
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