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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2007-06-12 01:11 PM



I'm not sure why, but here of late
I've not been able to concentrate.
My thoughts spin round, return to you
out there, somewhere, while I'm here blue.

I miss your touch, I miss your smile;
the soft of your voice crossed the miles.
Your happiness is my hearts desire.
I can't forget the flame, the feel of fire;
and I force myself not to want
but those brown eyes? Oh how they haunt.

Forgive me for speaking these feelings true
I feel alone, and I'm missing you.

© Copyright 2007 dmsmith - All Rights Reserved
Drauntz
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1 posted 2007-06-12 02:45 PM


so very good. a feeling can not be hide. we all want love.

good.

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2007-06-12 04:46 PM


well done,
hope the person knows,
for they are lucky to be your subject.

Gloom

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2007-06-12 04:54 PM


Wonderful flow Gentle Spirit ... the sense of longing and want comes through beautifully. Much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Topheth
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4 posted 2007-06-12 05:46 PM


Pleasantly put....
Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2007-06-12 08:53 PM


Thank you each, for leaving your words and thoughts here today.  
passing shadows
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6 posted 2007-06-12 09:45 PM


there are certain people we just never stop missing

again, looking in the mirror

JL
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7 posted 2007-06-12 10:08 PM


A beauty!


JL

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Jenna
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8 posted 2007-06-13 07:37 AM


Very beautiful. I enjoyed this poem
Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2007-06-13 09:40 AM


Dixie, JL, Jenna, thank you each.
secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !
10 posted 2007-06-15 07:23 PM


smooth, fine 'Romanticism'...
[touching, powerfully emotive!]

much applause!

SmartChick
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11 posted 2007-06-16 02:28 AM


You have spoken my heart here.
ladylisa
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12 posted 2007-06-16 04:38 PM


A beautifully versed expression of longing and missing someone.  This brought a peace to my heart as I am sitting here missing someone now.  Helped me.
miscellanea
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13 posted 2007-06-16 06:19 PM


Gentle Spirit,

   You write those spinning thoughts so well!
Excellent rendering of feeling!  I'm saving this beauti!  

miscellanea

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