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Drauntz
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0 posted 2007-06-11 07:05 PM


A misty mountain
A shadow shivering under the Sun
A misty sky
A  green-grayish art undone  
Or my dear summer
Are you sick
With such a high fever?
Do drink some poems
To get you back to spring


[This message has been edited by Drauntz (06-11-2007 07:43 PM).]

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2007-06-11 07:20 PM


outstanding!
passing shadows
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2 posted 2007-06-12 04:57 AM


I'm keeping this series, if you don't mind

I love it!

secondhanddreampoet
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3 posted 2007-06-12 07:52 AM


very interesting ‘write’!

I especially love ‘imagery’ such as:

“A shadow shivering under the Sun”

and the ending lines:

“…drink some poems
To get you back to spring”

applause!!

ladylisa
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4 posted 2007-06-12 09:45 AM


I agree, this is great imagery and loved the line about drink some poems.  They always bring me back to life.  Good write
Earth Angel
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5 posted 2007-06-12 01:11 PM


Drauntz, this is downright adorable! Your pen spills uniquely creative ink!


EA

Drauntz
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6 posted 2007-06-12 01:22 PM


Thank you all.

Dear passing, I believe you have more moody things to write and you write better, honestly. DO you feel that summer is too hot for writing poems?

HopeS
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7 posted 2007-06-12 02:46 PM


Seasons , mood and reasons , Wonderfully expressed

Hope

aziza
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8 posted 2007-06-14 01:45 AM


Lovely, Drauntz.

I am on my way to read the others.

A

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