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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
I came here in quietness I tiptoed on the clouds I whispered in your dream Till tear dropped me out I dropped into your cup You sipped me into your heart Shall I stay for a while? Before I break it apart. [This message has been edited by Drauntz (06-11-2007 11:41 AM).] |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
wow,,,this starts out so unbelievably tender and sweet, and then reality hits. very good job. |
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Broken_Inside New Member
since 2007-05-06
Posts 4Texas |
this was really good! Like the person above said, it starts off sweet and tender, then really hits! Very very good! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...nice...nice...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How simply we slip in... how painful the end. Enjoyed this one, Drauntz. |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
(teasing) Drauntz, I believe that the No Title title has already been used, though I'm not sure. There have been articles titled no title or an untitled story. Back in kiddy school we had to read a story called An Untitled Story, but I knew if I called the story I made up to get a grade an untitled story it would just mean an F! This does get me to thinking, though, that once all possible words have been used up, then everything that could be written will already have been written by somebody else. When this happens, creativity will come to an end. When this happens, all the forums will be closed and will all say: this is an archive ... you may reply, but new topics are not allowed ... Since it will then be impossible to post what hasn't already been posted, all the mods will be thrown out of work. More on this later, after I have my coffee. Where's that prehistoric-looking bird? You know, the one with scales? southern cross |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
that's pretty neat writing very creative |
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Topheth Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 297Texas |
Quite nice... and just the way I like them, revealing much with little. Often it seems too much reveals very little. Again, great read. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting and effective! applause! |
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ladylisa Member
since 2007-04-29
Posts 342Florida USA |
Wow!!!! Wonderful little piece. Love when a poem touches me on a personal level. Thanks. |
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perfect stranger Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 54on cloud 9 |
fantastic, you have great imagination cant wait to read more of your poems. |
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MegMeg Member
since 2007-05-14
Posts 85Virginia |
b-e-a-u-ti-ful! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
whoa! cool write  |
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MIcountrygirl79 Junior Member
since 2007-06-13
Posts 16Michigan, USA |
Beautiful! It's amazing how so few lines (when so well written) can create such a profound impact! Elizabeth |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Very thought provoking. A |
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