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Mixed Emotions |
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Forever in Love Junior Member
since 2007-05-31
Posts 24 |
Between a smile and a tear, is where i'm left to be. confused more than ever, gazing at the emptiness, seeing more than meets the eye, wondering who i really am, my stomach fills with butterflies, my heart holds on to something, i fight it, this is not who i am, on my knees trying to crawl, as much a i want to give up, my soul will not let me, somehow i dont gaze the same way at the sky, the colors seem bright or just a darker gray,is this a reality, or are my dreams overcoming me, either way the sun never seemed brighter **Also one of my first poems** |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Good one too. A |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"the colors seem bright or just a darker gray,is this a reality, or are my dreams overcoming me, either way the sun never seemed brighter" FIL: Very nice for a first write. I love the confusion or the uncertainty of where your thoughts try to produce reality or at least distinguish a difference. Very intriguing verse. Excellent write. Enjoyed the read, and hope to see more. JL  "The man who reads nothing at all is better educated than the man who reads nothing but newspapers." |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
this was a really great poem. good job. |
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