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Forever in Love
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since 2007-05-31
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0 posted 2007-06-02 01:45 AM



Your hands they tremble, your eyes fill with
tears, my heart aches, i feel your pain, you
smile and gently wipe your eyes, try to
cover the pain, it wont go away, i try to
run but my legs fall beneath me, i fall,
heart barely beating, i breathe, take one
more breath, cant hold on, my pain slowly
fades away, with one last breath i say i
love you, grab for your hand, to weak, im
just a memory.


      
    
  

  

** this is really old, its one of the first poems i wrote.**


© Copyright 2007 Forever in Love - All Rights Reserved
aziza
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since 2006-07-09
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1 posted 2007-06-02 02:13 AM


I like it.

A

JL
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since 2004-04-01
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Texas, USA
2 posted 2007-06-02 09:08 AM


Very nice write.

JL

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paullallady
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since 2007-04-03
Posts 262
Michigan
3 posted 2007-06-02 01:54 PM


very sad yet tender
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