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JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2007-06-01 08:22 AM


Casablanca  (The Stranger)

The stranger entered a room full of havana cigars
and turkish cigarettes, with creaky ceiling fans
caressing the smoky mess, and belly dancers
moving sensually in silhouette, dim lights that
seemed to invite late night parlevous and musty
corners an enticement for midnight rendezvous.
A good cigar and an experienced belly dancer
could do wonders for the aching bones of a
lonely traveler; in the club taking her
presence in, and later in a private room,
the real fun would begin, with the one
that was performing for his pleasure
and seemed to be dancing just for him.
She had the cutest smile wrapped around
her face, and yet in spite of her smile, the
stranger could sense a danger in this place.
The stranger had never met his soulmate,
only in his dreams, but this belly dancer
dancing, was the closest he'd ever seen.
And then the music stopped, as if a coin
was dropped, and just as quick as that
she was sitting on his lap.
The subject of discussion, was the pleasure
of a kiss, and she gave it with a passion
that the stranger would never want to miss.
And then she told the stranger, "There's
one thing you should know, I'm the property of
the notorious so and so.  He's a jealous man,
possessive and insecure, once he killed a man that
touched my hand, and he'll kill you too I'm sure.
I told her not to worry, for many a jealous man
I'd played the game, for this was a Bogart movie
and Bogart always gets the dame.

JamesLee
01June
2007



    



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Pilgrimage
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1 posted 2007-06-01 09:45 AM


Excellent last line, and I like the way you set the scene.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
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Los Angeles California
2 posted 2007-06-01 12:47 PM


"then the music stopped, as if a coin
was dropped" I love this unlogical logic...a silence made by stopped music is same as a silence made by a dropping coin. wow, beautiful.

the poem is beautiful.

enjoyed as always.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2007-06-02 06:40 AM


Thank you Pilgrimage and Drauntz for the nice responses...James
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