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That place after love
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That place after love |
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luvvbuzz Junior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 24 |
The memory blurs fast Of the woman i loved, before the last Though memories do often fade They get stored, as soon as they are made In a safer place, for when we leave this plane Do we meet up with all our old loves When we have taken our last breath? Do we forget the fights And love again after death? Are our memories all thats left Of a life of love thats been bereft? I hope we do, because it would mean no more The pain and loss in romantic war The petty squabbles, the pointless fights The times apart, the lonely nights So if memmories are all we take To the land after this when we never wake I will still be loving you. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh....now this is a  !" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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luvvbuzz Junior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 24 |
i am thinking this needs a new line to finish it off? how about... i shall not forsake. opinions? |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This was so emotionally filled, touching me as I thought of someone, and hoped these were their thoughts, words, and feelings. ~ARH |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I think that additional line would be wonderful though the poem is quite moving as it stands |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
What an absolutely moving piece ... and your suggestion for the closing line is a good one, but perhaps consider this also Your memory I shall not forsake~ BEAUTIFULLY done~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
You give me something to think about. This is touching. Nice write, Kristabell "You are today where your thoughts have brought you; you will be tomorrow where your thoughts take you." James Lane Allen |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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luvvbuzz Junior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 24 |
thanx very much for all your responses, i am glad i was able to share and that so many liked it. many thanks |
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