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A single wish, a broken heart....a memory that lingers evermore.
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A single wish, a broken heart....a memory that lingers evermore. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Softly, the breeze wanders through a wondering mind, whispering quietly into the rushes as vines curl and leaves swirl….as feathers Fly and eagles cry…and Robins seek the cherished worm. If only it were….and time was….when all else seems so far from A finger’s trace….and lovers again lie still as hearts race into the Dark of night..and lips again seek the sound of a sigh…a single Mingled sigh…Before the Loon’s cry breaks the glow of a Waking dawn. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus Well done a touching write. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
So good to read you again Barry, and with such a beautiful and soft write at that yet...Hugs. I've seen the paintings in the air |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Magnus, This brought back fond memories of hearing my first loon. It was on a family trip to the wilds of Canada. Being from the city, I had never heard the sound of a loon. It scared me half to death until I got used to it. As far as details go, remember, three dots for an ellipse, except when it ends a sentence, then it's four. I like the poem very much. Bobby |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
This is a wonderful weeving of words, bitter sweet. Nice write, Kristabell "You are today where your thoughts have brought you; you will be tomorrow where your thoughts take you." James Lane Allen |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dear friend... would that I could write the loon's cry as you do...  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
touching.... |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
so beautiful and romantic. very good. truly beautiful. enjoyed |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I loved this, the concept of bittersweet emotions...but Barry, the last line was indeed powerfully embracing...oh, how magnficiant.... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I liked this too. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If only it were….and time was…. You're playing my song here, dear friend... with a beauty and sensitivity that's breathtaking. *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you amaze me  |
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JaySea Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 23Salina, KS - USA |
Soul-full writing. Thank you for opening your inner-self. JaySea (Joseph) |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
such a descriptive write, of both the eyes and the ears. And the loon has such a lovely, lonely sound. beautiful. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write Barry... there is something so soulful and haunting about the loon's call. You captured it expertly. ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
touching  have missed your thoughts~My spirit will rise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
the cry of a loon and a wandering breeze beautifully done Barry |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
"…a single Mingled sigh…Before the Loon's cry breaks the glow of a Waking dawn." pleasant imagery; fine romanticism! applause! |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Just beautiful! Well done! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Barry, Wow! This has the potential to leave me speechless. Except then I couldn't tell you how incredible I believe this write to be. I see the setting, I hear the cry and I feel the ache. All becuase of your talent and experience. Very well done my friend.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Barry, this was a great write my friend, so many visions and feelings it brought, so happy you shared with us today. Rick |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Larry C and Rick....thanx gentlemen for the nudge of something...giving that my muse has kicked me out of the door and we are struggling to get something on paper!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry, If only it were….and time was… |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Very beautiful. Patricia |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I love seeing the world through your eyes, feeling the sensations that you share, and hearing the beauty that you bring as a gift. Alison |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
"a single mingled sigh".... leaves me sighing at the thought. I love the soft reflections of your words, and the heartspeak pulsing from time past into the now. Beautiful, Barry!  [This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (07-12-2007 06:58 AM).] |
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