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iwontdrownagain
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since 2003-10-04
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0 posted 2007-05-09 10:14 PM


Here's another old one. This one is probably 4 years old now, but I still like it in some odd way. I love feedback!

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Compose

Compose a piece of music
That has no melody, no tune.
Tell me how many people will listen
And sing along.
Write a 900-page novel
With no plot, no archetype.
Show me the stats that say it will be read
And it's Newbury Book Award.
Jot down a poem
With no structure, no meaning
And I guarantee it will get negative attention
And bad reviews.
Now think of these as people.
What would become of someone if they
Had no melody, no tune?
They would be the loners of the world,
Ignored because they don't go with the flow.
The ones with no base, no storyline, nothing in common with anyone.
These, my dear friends, are the wallflowers, the rejects.
The ones the pissy people spit on
Because Dave Matthews isn't part of their CD collection.
A psychologist might say those with no structure, no direction in life
Came from broken homes, were beaten or molested.
Sorry, Doc, that isn't always the case.
There are these people called bullies.
They beat people up, make fun and pound self-esteem to a pulp.
It's not easy being a song with no rhythm,
A novel with no plot.
A poem with no structure.
These people¡¦victims¡¦ don't deserve
To be smacked around, chewed up and spit out.
It's not fun. It's not deserved.
It's all for the hell of it, no reason.
Just fuel for the power trip that helps them get off.


Eep....I made a few revisions from on the advice I got from the last time I posted it.
Let me know what you think!


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Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
1 posted 2007-05-09 10:45 PM


we call it "flamingle among the chickens"
what is wrong with that?  your opinion is well said in your poem. Good. One shall live like a diamond and let others to wash the dirt.

You talked about a social issue. but a true hero is to swim across the mainstream. not against, not follow.

nice


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