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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-05-08 08:09 PM


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Someone else not you or I
Today is rising up as white smoke
To drift over Summer’s mountain

The wind fans my face
Makes black petals of your hair
Already I feel the cicadas' call

From deep in the valley a monkey’s howl
If only for a moment before we go
Hold my hand


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1 posted 2007-05-08 09:13 PM


wonderfully word-brushed scene, John
Huan Yi
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2 posted 2007-05-08 09:41 PM


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Thanks K

Some times I go Oriental

Thanks again

John



Drauntz
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3 posted 2007-05-08 10:24 PM


"Makes black petals of your hair"  how beautiuflly you choose the words that make me think that you are soooooooooo very old to see the scene by your own eyes.

beautiful as always.

May you have a very good night, Sir Yi Huan.


secondhanddreampoet
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4 posted 2007-05-09 01:54 PM


a most fine 'write'!

GRAND applause!!

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2007-05-09 06:56 PM


Enjoyed...James
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standing on a shadow's lace
6 posted 2007-05-09 06:57 PM


"Hold my hand"

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