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Grinch
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since 2005-12-31
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Whoville

0 posted 2007-05-06 06:52 PM



I’ve seen the future in my madness
Dance its fingers through my hair
Drag me to the edge of never
And hold me screaming there.

All the faceless ghosts of maybe
Cracking smiles into a frown
Draw me closer to forever
Then slowly drag me down.

Today is raining on tomorrow
See the droplets in my eyes?
Glistening they spell my fortune
Who'll kiss them into lies?


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aziza
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since 2006-07-09
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
1 posted 2007-05-06 07:16 PM


I can't single out one or two lines gripped me.  They all held me hostage to your poem.

Wow.

A

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
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2 posted 2007-05-06 08:54 PM


love, let the love out. mad but madly in love.
cool down. is she the right girl?

enjoyed.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
3 posted 2007-05-08 05:09 PM


Oh I do like the images in this one.  And unlike my stuff, which does one image and then embroiders on it, you do image,image,image; and then your language is evocative and spare, also.  Very well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27
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4 posted 2008-01-07 12:44 PM


sad!!! again.
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