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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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0 posted 2007-05-04 07:31 PM


   ‘New Love’ shores

As the evening sings
its sunset songs
to tattered hearts
and scattered hills
of velvet-forest green
(bathed in crimson chords
  of liquid-fire light,
  on this hypnotizing night),
I shall sail beyond all sorrows
on these dream-tossed,
‘timescape’ seas...
for new uncharted shores,
where wounded souls
may rest once more,
in the kind, soft sands
  of Love!


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2007-05-04 07:47 PM


Once again you succeeded in conveying a profound emotion with these romantic and poetically masterful expressions.

Bravo!

Love,
Margherita

ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18
Posts 498

2 posted 2007-05-04 07:55 PM


Your two recent posts, this one and the previous one, remind me that Shopenhauer tells us, "Talent hits a target no one else can hit, genius hits a target no one else can see."
Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
3 posted 2007-05-04 08:00 PM


What a jewel. A beauty to mummer out in the evening on the patio to the bright western sky.

May I suggest

Move the “tattered hearts” to  I shall sail “my tattered hearts”….

Because the first half you want to talk about the beauty, the spirit, the power and strength which inspired your later activity.

My thought.

Very romantic, truly.

Robert Jordan
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since 2007-02-07
Posts 392
Philadelphia Pa USA
4 posted 2007-05-04 09:49 PM


Secondhanddreampoet,

This is a well-put together poem.  I like your new word ‘timescape’.  That is an interesting and profound thought.

Bobby


The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
5 posted 2007-05-05 01:08 AM




poet
I think it's your poems
that keep me thinking
love can work...

"where wounded souls
may rest once more,
in the kind, soft sands
  of Love!"

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