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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2007-05-02 03:34 AM


I took her hand in mine and said,
"Know this--" I gave her a kiss--
"no one has the future sight
and what's behind is just a wisp
of the breath you're breathing now."

I caressed her hand again
folding all her fingers in--
and one by one, unraveling,
pressing them again, again,
into a fist and then undone

I did it repetitiously--
I spoke low and casually
noting that she tugged her sleeve
to hide her scars from me.
Grief ran electricity
up my arm into my heart
as I forgot to breathe,
I thought,
"Only grace can save me now."

She'd done the job with true intent
vertical, two down her wrist,
pointing right at me in pain
twins in keloid, like the train
rails of track within her mind
I murmered "Leave it all behind."

   "Lay your burden down my friend.
   Give it up, this pestilent
   thought of wishing for an end
   as if your life were budgeted
   with zeroes for the balancing-
   lay your burden down."

I smiled at her and told her truth.
"Your future is the now in you."
She seemed to be afraid of this--
so I gave her back her fist.

"Use that wisely, my sweet friend."
I kissed each finger, counting ten.
"What goes round will come again--
even all you thought was lost."

Grace will pay the cost
I thought.
I closed my eyes to light and naught
but she was tossed
back to the past,
circling her yesterdays
and I was afraid
and shamed
for leading us both back to this:
the moment of divergences...

again, and then her pain,
her friend
bled into me, from the ends
of her sleeves, and two long scars
were mocking me, and haunting her
as her pledges screamed--I dreamed
of the splitting seams of her --

"No." I said aloud as she
whispered my own thought to me:

"Grace will pay the cost." said she,
whispering, "St. Demphna, please,
take the worry of my needs..."
The tinkle of the chimes agreed
as the fingertip of breeze
played the scale to balancing
and she and I were both relieved--
the same--but oh so differently.

No dishes from the feast to wash--
for Grace had paid the cost.


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iliana
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1 posted 2007-05-02 03:41 AM


My oh my, Ser, this sure is a terrifically powerful poem.  I'm going back to read it again.  (What are we doing up so late????)  lubs......jojo
serenity blaze
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2 posted 2007-05-02 03:45 AM


What are we doing up so late?

WRITING POETRY


grin

(you can call, but you'd better make it before four, or three, and I am soooooo craving vegemite)

thanks for reading twin/friend

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2007-05-02 08:37 AM


"No dishes from the feast to wash--
for Grace had paid the cost." Serenity my dear, true poetry.


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4 posted 2007-05-02 10:12 AM


First word to last... you held me mesmerized

Bravo!

LeeJ
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5 posted 2007-05-02 10:22 AM


oh how I love your stories from within poetry...amazing...and yes, held my attention from beginning to end...
very much enjoy you....

1slick_lady
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6 posted 2007-05-02 11:37 AM


"Your future is the now in you."


soooo true
do not give up your future for your past

The Lady
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7 posted 2007-05-02 11:49 AM




"twins in keloid, like the train
rails of track within her mind"

you amaze me Karen

latearrival
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8 posted 2007-05-02 12:27 PM


Woman.. You can not compare to anyone I know. I wish I could express what I see in you. But I think you know how I feel. Martyjo  
Drauntz
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9 posted 2007-05-02 12:29 PM


a very powerful poem. what a loving heart and strong mind you have.

enjoyed.

Paula Finn
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10 posted 2007-05-02 12:52 PM


Only you could make the pain into a thing of beauty
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11 posted 2007-05-02 01:33 PM


Excellent!       Excellent!       Excellent!       Excellent!       Excellent!


serenity blaze
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12 posted 2007-05-02 07:33 PM


Ya'll are so kind to me--you all make me feel like there may be hope for me yet!

I love the whole bunch of you folks, and I know some people think we shouldn't put too much "stock" in "replies" but when every one of 'em feels like a hug, how can I NOT?

and oh Mysteria, my cute Canadian nut, it is ME--I am the one not worthy.

Love to all.

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