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TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

0 posted 2007-05-01 03:26 PM

So we brokered no thoughts of desertion
When the prophets confessed to their fraud
And the sinners who watched from the dance floor
Demanded their share of our God

How I loved you forever and ever
As I sang the song Sweet Adeline
So we waltzed to a tune that was silent
But our steps could not keep the time

Ah we danced to a jig that was broken
As the candles burned low in the night
From the wax of each candle we moulded
An effigy golden and bright

Then the effigy stood on a bar stool
And recited the mantra of pain
Then to all of the fools who would listen
It recited her mantra again

Now our feet they are bloody and swollen
As the music continues to play
We have danced every year of forever
We have danced for not even a day

Now I bid you farewell for the evening
As the partners continue to change
And they play Adeline one more time
Before turning over the page

http://thoughtspoetry.blogspot.com

TerryW
Senior Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA

1 posted 2007-05-01 03:41 PM

TC --
Welcome to Passions! This was a truly beautiful poem! You have incredible talent! I will be looking for more from you soon!

~Terry

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

2 posted 2007-05-01 03:48 PM

very good. a casual sadness.

enjoyed.

quatro
Member

since 2003-04-29

Posts 392
Galveston, Texas

3 posted 2007-05-01 05:05 PM

TC,

I enjoyed this. Thanks for the read.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2007-05-01 05:59 PM

Welcome to PIP!

There is this touch of melancholy, immersed in a tune and combined with a dance, conveying a very special atmosphere.

I like it.

Love,
Margherita

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2007-05-01 06:53 PM

I'm afraid you've already garnered one fan...

Welcome to Passions!

Please, check your Email for a
Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

6 posted 2007-05-01 10:15 PM

welcome to the passion

TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

7 posted 2007-05-02 03:02 PM

Hi Terry,
Thank you for the great compliment, and yes I wiil post some more very soon.

Regards
Jim

TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

8 posted 2007-05-02 03:04 PM

Hi Drauntz,
Thank you for the warm welcome.
Glad you enjoyed.

Regards
Jim

TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

9 posted 2007-05-02 03:06 PM

Hi Quatro,
No problem, you are very welcome.

Regards
Jim

TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

10 posted 2007-05-02 03:10 PM

Thank you Margherita for the special comment.

Regards
Jim

TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

11 posted 2007-05-02 03:14 PM

Oh Sunshine,
Thank you so much for the fantastic reception you have all given this poor fool who thinks he can write poetry.

I had a look at you own website and you are no mean talent yourself.

Your new fan
Jim

TC
Junior Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 15
Scotland

12 posted 2007-05-02 03:15 PM

Thank you Slick Lady, I am honored to be here.

Regards
Jim

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