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aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2007-05-01 02:50 AM


Soul parts drifted into words.
Expressive dreams of an
illogical mind
swept into a pile of sentences
which inadequately
mirrored and reflected
matters of the heart.

Logic was lost in a mist of
emotional meltdown.

aziza

© Copyright 2007 Alison - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2007-05-01 03:08 AM


quote:

Logic was lost in a mist of
emotional meltdown.



Powerful expression. Even only parts of the soul can bring a transparency unknown to the logical mind.

Beautiful!

Love,
Margherita


aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
2 posted 2007-05-01 03:18 AM


Thank you for the beautiful thoughts you shared too.

Alison

OwlSA
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3 posted 2007-05-01 04:19 AM


If the parts of your soul/his soul/both of your souls are this beautiful, perhaps it is good that we aren't exposed to the whole soul (or, even more, both souls!) - we might be blinded - even through the mist!

- Owl

The Lady
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4 posted 2007-05-02 01:01 AM




"Expressive dreams of an
illogical mind
swept into a pile of sentences"

you say it so well Alison
it grabs me

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2007-05-02 09:06 AM


"Logic was lost in a mist of
emotional meltdown."

~ Which is, unfortunately, so often the case.

A little poem with lots of emotion! Well done!

Loving hug,
EA

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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2007-05-02 02:50 PM


Well writ

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Drauntz
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7 posted 2007-05-02 04:41 PM


beautiful!

"Logic was lost in a mist of
emotional meltdown." why we need it annway!

enjoyed

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2007-05-02 06:06 PM


I shouldn't laugh (smile)at this:
"Logic was lost in a mist of
emotional meltdown."

but I am in the middle of one...


M

aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
9 posted 2007-05-02 11:33 PM


Owl

You are such a beautiful person and you bring that beauty to every poem of mine that you respond to.  Thank you for the gift of your thoughts and words.

Alison

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Darlin' Lady

Your writing often leaves me speechless as it so beautiful and moves me so deeply.  Thank you for responding to my poem.

A

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EA  

Emotion spills out of me, but I am totally inept in the logic area.  Thank you for reading and responding.

xoxoxo
A

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Interloper

Thank you for dropping in and reading.  I look for your work and always smile when I see you have read one of my pieces.

A

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Drauntz

Thank you for reading, commenting and enjoying.

---

M

I just am always happy to see you responding.  I admire your thoughts a lot.

A

suthern
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10 posted 2007-05-04 02:40 PM


What an exquisite expression of something many of us have known intimately at one time or another! *S* Beautiful work!
jwesley
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11 posted 2007-05-04 09:57 PM


YES! Wonderful write! Even has me sitting here, paused in my typing, thinking about it...

again...yes!

j.

aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
12 posted 2007-05-06 04:22 PM


suthern and jwesley

Thank you both.  I admire both of your writing and you made me smile as I read your comments to this poem.

I am honored to be writing and posting with you and the others in PiP.

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