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Kethry
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0 posted 2007-04-30 05:07 PM


I dreamed bright love a calling came
across the desert seas of flame
he heard my heart, he called my name
and I will go with him.

He touched my lips and they were sealed
against the pain  that love might yield
he took me from this barren field
and I will go with him.

He led me to the place of rest
where dreams don’t fade and I am blessed
he clothed me in his joy and dressed
me full in love for him.

He  took my tears and wiped away
the stain of living everyday
he taught me how to laugh and pray
and I will dwell with him.


a good commitee can decimate communication.

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Drauntz
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1 posted 2007-04-30 05:29 PM


what a beautiful love poem. make me warm.

enjoyed happily

andrey
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2 posted 2007-04-30 05:30 PM


very beautiful!
miscellanea
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3 posted 2007-04-30 06:27 PM


If this is the 23rd love song, I'd sure like to hear the other 22!  There are so many neat lines; especially liked this:

"he clothed me in his joy and dressed
me full in love for him."

Beautiful poem!

miscellanea

Margherita
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4 posted 2007-05-01 03:17 AM


And well you do to dwell with him.

So beautiful!

Love,
Margherita

latearrival
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5 posted 2007-05-01 04:06 AM


Beautiful.What a dream. martyjo
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6 posted 2007-05-01 07:41 AM


Kethry~

Beautifully sung~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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7 posted 2007-05-01 10:55 AM


This is absolutely lovely, my friend... It leaves a sense of reverence and awe... and peace worthy of the finest psalm. *S*
Earth Angel
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8 posted 2007-05-01 11:16 AM


"He  took my tears and wiped away
the stain of living everyday
he taught me how to laugh and pray
and I will dwell with him."

~ Sounds like a man worthy of dwelling with!

Your poem made my heart skip merrily along! Thank you for the joyful experience!


Linda

LeeJ
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9 posted 2007-05-01 11:22 AM


so much enjoyed the meter...and the last line of each and every paragraph, as if to say...stop and think about each and every sentence above....almost like viewing hindsight upclose and personal...who possesses God in image...

marvelous write...

Paula Finn
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missouri
10 posted 2007-05-02 12:49 PM


So very lovely...makes me yearn
nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2007-05-02 05:52 PM


the stain of living everyday...for some reason this is my favorite line...


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