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Robert Jordan
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0 posted 2007-04-30 01:58 PM


It’s spring,
and all the cherry trees
are blooming.  

It doe’s no good.  
Since the cops came
and took his old man away.  

Damned old man anyway,
always getting in trouble
with the cops.  

Nothing can cheer Felix up.  

He walks around the street,
with his head held down,
his long hair
covering his eyes.  

Nothing he can do for it.

His old lady,
she’s no help.  
All she does
is spend her time
yelling at him.  

Sometimes
she’ll hit him.  

She doesn’t have any reason
for doing that.  
He never says any thing
to her.  

She doesn’t even bother
fixing him anything to eat.  

All she does
is lie around the house
stuffing her own mouth
with chocolate bars.

Yeah, it’s bad.  
It’s even worse than usual.  

He wishes the cops
would let his old man
out of the jail.  

He’d make his old lady
cook some food.

Then at least,
he’d have something
to eat.

Bobby

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Margherita
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1 posted 2007-05-01 03:26 AM


First thought: it's about time that Felix stands tall and begins to realize his own worthiness. Passiveness will lead nowhere.

Second thought: the cherry blossoms increase the overall sadness of this poem, because they are unseen by the main character.

Third thought: if I was Felix at least I would procure my part of chocolate bars...


Thank you for sharing.

Love,
Margherita

Robert Jordan
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2 posted 2007-05-01 08:25 AM


Yo Margherita,

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Give the kid a chance.  This is the very early Felix.  He’s still at home, and hasn’t been taken into foster care yet.  Felix will develop into a nasty, aggressive type guy, just give him a chance.  We all start out like Felix, real sweet and non-aggressive.

About those cherry trees, here in the hood the pink chock-cherry blossoms are all over the place.

Bobby

Margherita
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3 posted 2007-05-01 09:31 AM


It must be a beautiful sight, Bobby, I miss my own cherry tree of my childhood.

Yes of course I give little Felix a chance, it is a question of age also. The unhappiness of children who feel unloved is so unbearable, it hurts. And to know what they risk of becoming in the future makes it even worse.

Only love can bring healing.

Love,
Margherita


Robert Jordan
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4 posted 2007-05-01 10:09 AM


Margarita,

Thanks for the great picture.  Our cherry trees on the street have pink blossoms.  I can't post pictures here, so just imagine your tree as redish pink.

Bobby



Margherita
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5 posted 2007-05-01 11:44 AM


I imagine ...

    


Blooming cherry trees:

a promise of future fruits

like a newborn's smile



Dedicated to Felix ...


Love,
Margherita  



Robert Jordan
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6 posted 2007-05-01 12:32 PM


Margherita,

There you go hon.  That's the kind of cherry trees we have here.  Thanks for posting them.  Felix says thanks too.

Love Bobby

secondhanddreampoet
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7 posted 2007-05-02 09:10 PM


The 'Felix' saga should prove REALLY interesting!!

[Robert, you are a grand addition to this 'P.I.P.-
   world' forum!]

There is quite a fine mix of 'poetic styles' in here
at the moment!.....

Robert Jordan
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8 posted 2007-05-02 09:24 PM


Secondhanddreampoet,

Thanks so much for the encouraging words.  I'm working on the next Felix episode.

Bobby

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