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0 posted 2007-04-28 09:16 PM





When my venom spills
into the wound I inflicted
know
my heart
is not conflicted
there is no question
that the poison
spewed
has sincere intention
to express
I could not possibly
hate you
any less


~SEA~


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1 posted 2007-04-28 09:34 PM


quite a remarkably powerful 'write'!

I write on some 'detached' philosophical plane....
even when I do the 'dark' and 'social impact/conscience'
writes....I never quite manage to achieve such fine, direct,
emotive realism...as this!

MUCH applause!!

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2 posted 2007-04-28 09:50 PM


Wow.

Now this startled me. All I can say is that if someone provoked this from you, they must have done something pretty bad, because you are normally such a sweet and placid soul.

But even the SEA can kick up a mean tide!

Hope it helped, lovie.

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3 posted 2007-04-29 06:24 AM


DUCK!

Wow...now this made the hair on my arms stand up. Powerful write...and that person better RUN!

Amy



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4 posted 2007-04-29 08:14 AM


SEA~
Well, you really should just go ahead and speak your mind~

Love the take on this one, gal~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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5 posted 2007-04-29 08:31 AM


~written with the pen of intensity!~
The hairs on my arm stood straight up reading this!
Susan, this piece presents such a different SEA-scape from the gentler word-waves that tend to characterize your poetic offerings.  

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6 posted 2007-04-29 09:04 AM


Hate is such a destructive emotion, destroying the hater so much more than the hated, but to let it out in a poem can be very cathartic.  I hope this poem freed you.  No matter what, it is an excellent, power-punch poem.  Wishing you peace and happiness.

- Owl

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7 posted 2007-04-29 09:18 AM


wow Susan! This is really not like you at all...I was surprised to read!

I did love it though and could relate...memories of certain people in my past...and I'm so glad they are in my past.


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8 posted 2007-04-29 09:47 AM


Very intense, stirred up a lot of powerful emotions in me.
Excellent write

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9 posted 2007-04-29 09:53 AM


THIS I wish I had written. Absolutely LOVED IT!

jimmy

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10 posted 2007-04-29 06:34 PM


wow! again like others have said...I didn't expect this...someone said to me today that forgiving is much healthier than holding onto
the pain and hurt of anger or hatred from, by or for another.

good  writing


M

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11 posted 2007-04-29 10:21 PM


ouch,  been a long time since i have been here but i must say this was quite a shocking but great write from you.
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12 posted 2007-04-29 11:34 PM


pretty "hate". a beautiful poem.

enjoyed.

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13 posted 2007-04-30 10:53 AM


Gosh ... yes there might be such turbulences even in a usually placid SEA! The picture you choose is perfect with your "dark" words. Good to see your smiling eyes next to it, to find the balance.

Powerful indeed!

Love,
Margherita

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14 posted 2007-04-30 02:50 PM


Glad I wasn't in the vicinity

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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15 posted 2007-05-02 09:40 AM


The twist from the expected in this reminds me of the song "Loathing" from Wicked (which I love *S*)... What a great the SEA rage you've written... though I'd hate to get caught in this storm!!


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16 posted 2007-05-02 11:50 AM


yes, very powerful and profound...love both the pic and your words make the pic alive...

waht true grit you own.

Hugs
Me

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17 posted 2007-05-10 09:49 PM


lol! Nice
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18 posted 2007-05-11 07:32 AM


that's kinda like saying "I wish for you a cruise ship full of gold....and it still not be enough to pay your doctor bills".....
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19 posted 2007-05-12 03:54 AM


Nice writing...James
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good read
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21 posted 2007-05-13 06:05 PM


Lots of power
and so well said.

Alison

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22 posted 2007-05-14 07:14 PM


Sea darling girl, this is without doubt one of the most powerful pieces of writing I have ever read. I would hate to be the person this is aimed at, but OH MY how well you wrote it.

I am always honest darling one, and this is truly one of your best!

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy
X x x x x

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23 posted 2007-05-28 01:04 AM


The wound lies deep - it's true,
and you possess the right to bite.
No tight a tourniquet will save
so lost a heart as mine tonight.
For all I've done - all forgot,
All for you to die and rot.
But at this end, I implore,
Now could you love me any more?


Greetings, Sea

"We live our lives in rooms of the mind, rooms of the body."

SEA
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24 posted 2007-05-28 01:35 AM


Thank you all for the really great replies...and Topheth, hey that was excellent good to see you around again!
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25 posted 2007-05-28 11:27 AM


Whoa! I pity the person who merits your "sincere intentions"! Someone must have done you wrong ~ big time!, Sweet SEA. The power in your words darn near knocked me off my cloud! lol

Great write!!!


Linda

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26 posted 2007-05-28 11:31 AM


Man, I'm glad I'm not on the end of the poking stick.  Well done, Susan!


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